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Bittertooth
Contributed by
ConfusedPancake
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Saturday, 3rd April 2004 @ 12:04:06 PM in AEST
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in life's design a mismatched outcome
cannot see it, home
pick your pocket and find a way
try to see it, home
where do the lawn gnomes go
when no one feels like spending money
sifting through the endless bees
searching for your honey
can't have your cake and eat it too
it's too sweet for you
when the time is right and the morning's thin
scorched into the earth again, your home
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Re: Bittertooth
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 3rd April 2004 @ 12:21:08 PM AEST
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Where do the lawn gnomes go? ha! you've got me thinking now! maybe they go on holiday abroad? where apart from normal pursuits like gnome boarding and fishing (in a much bigger pond) They study the financial index till they feel there is stability within the economy, then they return as an overpriced garden ornament!
Oh god i've finally lost it...
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Re: Bittertooth
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by spider on
Saturday, 3rd April 2004 @ 04:32:26 PM AEST
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| dont be mean! im sure whoever wrote this had a valid point about the gnomes, think you'll find (at east in my head) that the gnomes aren't actually lawn gnomes. ever heard of a metaphor? is luvley poem me likey. |
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Re: Bittertooth
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by valek on
Monday, 5th April 2004 @ 10:49:21 PM AEST
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keep up the good work....
very nice metophorical speakings
i like it alot
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Re: Bittertooth
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 6th May 2004 @ 06:52:40 AM AEST
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this poem was good, i thought every single line was good ... although, i am not sure how the "when no one feels like spending money" line fits w/ the poem ..
i felt as if it was the odd line out, you know?
other than that though, i liked it a lot! :)
-sean |
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