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As the Madness is Fed
Contributed by
bobotheclown
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Friday, 2nd April 2004 @ 09:56:48 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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I wish that I could just ***** die
Close my eyes and forever cry
I wish that I could just weep
Instead of having everything inside to keep
I'm trapped in this dark, lonely cell
Curled on the floor, portraying everything isn't well
I'm trapped in this depression
That is my dark confession
This sadness I cannot contain
As all happiness doth wane
This sadness has me pinned upon the floor
Leaving me lost and bruised to the core
Blood slowly spatters to the ground
Scarce emitting a single sound
Blood spilt defines this sadness
And deep within feeds this madness
Copyright ©
bobotheclown
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2004-04-02 21:56:48]
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Re: As the Madness is Fed
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by Cynthia on
Friday, 2nd April 2004 @ 10:08:56 PM AEST
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| Bobo, your heart cries out in pain. Such a sad write. *S* Cynthia |
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Re: As the Madness is Fed
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by PoOkSiE on
Friday, 2nd April 2004 @ 10:11:39 PM AEST
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| good job! i liked it, KICK A**!! |
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Re: As the Madness is Fed
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by xoblondiebabix3 on
Friday, 2nd April 2004 @ 10:17:33 PM AEST
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wow.. i really luved this poem.. its very dark,great imagery! i feel practically the same way
*XoXoXo* |
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Re: As the Madness is Fed
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 2nd April 2004 @ 10:40:29 PM AEST
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great emotional turmoil here my friend, no doubt words from your soul. Keep fighting it...
very well done
Larry |
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Re: As the Madness is Fed
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by thumper on
Saturday, 3rd April 2004 @ 01:52:42 AM AEST
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| You phrased this wonderfully even though it is a dark write. Depression has that effect on people. Dark writes, I mean. I know the feeling. I suffer from depression myself. I hope someday we can all emerge from our caves of misery and smile. Write on, bobo! ; 0 ) |
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Re: As the Madness is Fed
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by afraid_of_fear on
Saturday, 3rd April 2004 @ 03:37:25 PM AEST
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this is incredible..
"This sadness has me pinned upon the floor
Leaving me lost and bruised to the core"
Those lines have me lost for words..
Beautiful..
char xx |
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Re: As the Madness is Fed
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by Soulless on
Sunday, 4th April 2004 @ 10:41:38 PM AEST
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Absolutely astounding, I enjoyed reading this. The title especially caught my eye and from then on you were feeding me this wonderful poem. It holds such emotion of how your struggling to contain yourself. Wonderful.
Kisses,
~Soulless~ |
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Re: As the Madness is Fed
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by Stitch on
Monday, 5th April 2004 @ 07:35:46 PM AEST
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Talk about a description of depression!
"This sadness has me pinned upon the floor"
This is my favorite line, and I can related completely to this feeling. Interesting you picked the floor rather than the wall. So much more descriptive of the real mood and it avoids the trite. Nice stuff.
Stitch
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Re: As the Madness is Fed
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by alecfernadez on
Wednesday, 7th April 2004 @ 03:23:27 PM AEST
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| Yet again I can totally relate to this. Your way of writing intregues me, which is why I can get into your poems. So dark, so morbid yet so strangely beuatiful 11/10! |
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Re: As the Madness is Fed
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by persia on
Thursday, 15th April 2004 @ 03:19:40 PM AEST
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| Speechless at ur pain...Persia |
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Re: As the Madness is Fed
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by CuttersAngel on
Thursday, 15th April 2004 @ 06:33:14 PM AEST
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Wow... i think this is one of your very few that rhyme... i didnt figure that it was a writing style of yours.. great job. Hope to talk to you this weekend...
cilla |
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