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Torpid
Contributed by
Soulless
on
Friday, 2nd April 2004 @ 09:27:15 PM in AEST
Topic:
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On my shelf sits a black box
Ordinary and worn
Among its boundaries lay broken thoughts
Ensnared in a rose of red
Fragments of a whole
Fallen from every petal
Your the reason I cry when Im alone
Lost with answers all a blur
Your the reason this rose has grown
You who has made it wither
How could such delicasy survive here
I feel you took my dreams and made them real
Reminding me of innocence lingering near
As if I dont feel
Fragments of a whole
Fallen from every petal
Your the reason I cry when Im alone
Lost with answers all a blur
Your the reason this rose has grown
You who has made it wither
The world is crumbling in front of my eyes
Yet you leave me caught between myself
Picking through reality built from lies
Slowly the petals fall from my shelf
Shriveled and lifeless
Fragments of a whole
Fallen from every petal
Your the reason I cry when Im alone
Lost with answers all a blur
Your the reason this rose has grown
You who has made it wither
Fragments of a whole
Fallen from every petal
Like my rose was never real
As if I dont feel
All my dreams wasted
Never seen real
All seen torpid
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Soulless
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2004-04-02 21:27:15]
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Re: Torpid
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by bobotheclown on
Friday, 2nd April 2004 @ 09:48:05 PM AEST
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WOW! I thought to myself that I had to read a poem called 'Torpid' and I am so glad I did... this was friggin amazing. I read it over a few times and tried to pick out a favourite line, but was unable to as it was all equally great. I'm gonna go read it again...
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Re: Torpid
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by Essentially9 on
Saturday, 3rd April 2004 @ 12:43:18 AM AEST
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| truely amazing |
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Re: Torpid
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by little_genna on
Sunday, 4th April 2004 @ 09:17:07 AM AEST
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this is a wonderful poem and strangely how im feeling towards my 'nameless guy of inspiration'. keep writing.
love and hugs
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Re: Torpid
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 14th May 2004 @ 12:35:13 AM AEST
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omg this is amazingly beautiful! an exquisite poem, what poetry is all about, i am captivated, not enough stars here:) hugs n' love, nessa
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Re: Torpid
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 17th May 2004 @ 05:03:08 AM AEST
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Rhythmic. Evokes poignancy in its falling petals.
A worthwhile read. |
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Re: Torpid
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by blueheart on
Sunday, 23rd May 2004 @ 09:04:30 PM AEST
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| Brilliant piece. Bravo. :) |
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