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From the beginning the to end
Contributed by
Jere
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Wednesday, 31st March 2004 @ 10:58:09 PM in AEST
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Every step I take
Is one less
From the beginning
To the end
Any breath I take
Could be my last
As another's first
And several other's past
We seek life through
One heart beat at a time
As time goes by
Our life goes by
One way or another
The day will come
When our heart stops
But our soul stays forever
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2004-03-31 22:58:09]
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Re: From the beginning the to end
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by Parrotwing on
Wednesday, 31st March 2004 @ 11:04:02 PM AEST
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| I like stuff about time passing with or without us. "But our soul stays forever" was a real good end line. |
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Re: From the beginning the to end
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by JadedExistence on
Wednesday, 31st March 2004 @ 11:09:51 PM AEST
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Nice poem, I hope you did well on your project. I agree with the last comment, the last line was great. Welcome to YPDC.
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Re: From the beginning the to end
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 1st April 2004 @ 12:06:33 PM AEST
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Interesting write, with several good observations.
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Re: From the beginning the to end
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by bobotheclown on
Friday, 12th November 2004 @ 04:10:00 PM AEST
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It seems like a rather simple poem, but it is
not. I liked how this poem ends the ending is
so deep. Personally, I thought the second
stanza was a bit awkward, but other than that
a good poem. I hope to see more by you.
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Re: From the beginning the to end
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by Jere on
Friday, 12th November 2004 @ 05:41:10 PM AEST
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what i mean by
Any breath I take
Could be my last
As another's first
And several other's past
is observing the reproduction of our population. |
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Re: From the beginning the to end
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by thexshattered on
Tuesday, 27th February 2007 @ 08:15:07 AM AEST
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| Hm... Well I like the philosophies about life, which, I assume, are your own takes on the subject of life? Not negative, nor positive, just plain truth. Very gray area, which I like. You can never know which is really which. |
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