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Shattered little girl
Contributed by
silent
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Wednesday, 31st March 2004 @ 09:00:53 AM in AEST
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Two eyes I have
And what do they see
The pain, the hurt and the misery
Two ears I have
And what do they hear
The sounds of feet approaching near
Two legs you have
And what do they do
They hide the weapon you use to abuse
Two arms you have
And what do they do
They hold me in place while you tighten the screw
One mouth I have
And what does it say
It silently prays that you’ll die today
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Re: Shattered little girl
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by lostinmyself on
Wednesday, 31st March 2004 @ 09:06:30 AM AEST
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| wow, that really touches me...i have felt the same in the past. this is very emotional and painful. if you want to talk pm me, luv n hugs, phil xxx |
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Re: Shattered little girl
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by Stitch on
Wednesday, 31st March 2004 @ 10:52:08 AM AEST
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Heartwrenching in its simplicity.
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Re: Shattered little girl
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by AliB on
Wednesday, 31st March 2004 @ 11:32:28 AM AEST
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Wow that really moved me. I've really no idea what this feels like but you have shown me in your words,,*shivers* I hope you can get through this, pm me if you wanna talk, All the best.
Ali xx |
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Re: Shattered little girl
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by parkman on
Wednesday, 31st March 2004 @ 01:36:43 PM AEST
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| Hard hitting and shockingly a side of life that exsists, excellent brave write |
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Re: Shattered little girl
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 31st March 2004 @ 02:14:14 PM AEST
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Abuse does shatter lives, emotionally and physically. They never totally recover from it. I wish all the abusers the worst in life and wish the world would do more to stop it. For some strange reason the child generally thinks they deserve it. Very sad.
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Re: Shattered little girl
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by arden on
Wednesday, 31st March 2004 @ 09:16:35 PM AEST
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wow this is deep. very dark and just great. i really liked this one. good work keep it up.
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Re: Shattered little girl
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by saveMEfromMYSELF on
Thursday, 1st April 2004 @ 05:22:30 AM AEST
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| Amazing. Myself, I was never physically abused much, but emotional pain can hurt as bad. It's hard to not want to say I'm sorry this happened to you for it is a most wretched thing. But best of luck and I wish you well. |
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Re: Shattered little girl
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by Soulless on
Saturday, 3rd April 2004 @ 08:17:27 PM AEST
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Absolutely wonderful writing techniques you use in that. Very unique style I have never seen. I love the last stanza especially.
"One mouth I have
And what does it say
It silently prays that you’ll die today"
Beautiful write
kisses,
~Soulless~ |
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Re: Shattered little girl
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by weepingprophet on
Thursday, 5th January 2006 @ 01:49:18 AM AEST
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First of all, your description and passion in this piece remains uncompromised. This was a flawless write in every way. Secondly, never surrender to the mindset that abuse is the end and that you are a powerless victim. Wether this a first person account or personal in another way, you are granted a great gift. You possess such a talent in writing and artist are born into suffering, the true and great ones anyways. Suffering is what fuels the fire inside of us, its what bleeds into our words and makes an illusion accurate. Take everything that you can from what you have been granted. Disaster can be beauty in the heart of an artist.
-on a similar note but not even close to as artfully written give my "To every motherf***ing pedophile out there" in my diary a read.-
~silence is deadly, silence is sick, silence is wounding and i will enflict~weepingprophet |
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