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Frost Impaled
Contributed by
Avarice_Riot
on
Wednesday, 31st March 2004 @ 08:13:23 AM in AEST
Topic:
Grief
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The stars, they string the night sky
with countless stories
I wish you were here with me tonight
to help me turn the pages
Our tale is somewhere there, I know
I drink the written words to make believe
the thirst for yearning can be quenched.
I've trusted my illusions all this time
to ward off what concrete reality
has thrown onto my doorstep.
"Hey fool, what made you think
you could run away from the truth?"
Frost impaled intact in me
can't you see I never stopped bleeding
Even with the ice against my skin?
You're here with me tonight
I feel you here beside me
Coating the air with silence in your wake
I try to touch you but you dissolve
"Hey fool, what made you hope
you could alter the past?"
I cast bitter tears towards the sky
and beg, "Don't leave me again!"
But all I can see are the stars....
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Re: Frost Impaled
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 31st March 2004 @ 08:33:20 AM AEST
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| Aah..this also very much captivating..even though this is soaked by tears..venkat |
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Re: Frost Impaled
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by Necromant on
Wednesday, 31st March 2004 @ 08:39:46 AM AEST
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What a heart tearing poem! Makes you want to cry! *sniff sniff* Wonderfully written!
Anne :D |
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Re: Frost Impaled
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by lostinmyself on
Wednesday, 31st March 2004 @ 09:10:56 AM AEST
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| this is so sad. it almost made me cry...i think i acually welled up. i love this poem, it is a great emotional write. luv n hugs, phil xxx |
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Re: Frost Impaled
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by Stitch on
Wednesday, 31st March 2004 @ 09:54:39 AM AEST
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The first stanza is my favorite, but I love the way it leads up to the end. Kept me entranced.
Stitch |
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Re: Frost Impaled
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by arden on
Wednesday, 31st March 2004 @ 10:22:42 AM AEST
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very sad and deep poem. wonderfully written. keep it up.
Arden |
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Re: Frost Impaled
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by JennyFruFru on
Wednesday, 31st March 2004 @ 12:34:51 PM AEST
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| this is extremely deep and well written.... and yet so so sad..... |
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Re: Frost Impaled
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by STRaNGe_LiNDSeY on
Wednesday, 31st March 2004 @ 03:18:57 PM AEST
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| very gripping and very sad poem, but well written. and i LOVE how you used a line from shakespeare to draw us in... great poem |
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Re: Frost Impaled
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 31st March 2004 @ 05:43:36 PM AEST
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absolutely beautifully breathtaking, hugs n' love nessa
@->>->- |
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Re: Frost Impaled
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by Baronhawk on
Wednesday, 31st March 2004 @ 06:07:44 PM AEST
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Wonderful words... almost enough to make me weep.. such agony such longing in despair. Nicely structured and very nicely potrayed. Frost impaled.. I can almost feel its piercing wake. Tha past is past indeed and truth does really hurts...nice work!
This dreadful pain in the guts
"frost impaled"
a wrenching feeling in the heart. |
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Re: Frost Impaled
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by twinkletoes on
Thursday, 1st April 2004 @ 01:39:05 AM AEST
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I have read this a number of times today, and probably will do again. (I think) I have taken in your meaning, your prose are wonderful to read.
tt |
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Re: Frost Impaled
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 1st April 2004 @ 04:12:23 AM AEST
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| Wow.....simply awesome. I am speechless by your heartwrenching words. Magnificant piece of poetry. |
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Re: Frost Impaled
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by silent on
Thursday, 1st April 2004 @ 09:25:24 AM AEST
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You have done an extremely good job with this my friend, quite a deep write, but wonderfully expressed. Quite haunting. I love deep poems like this.
Silent |
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Re: Frost Impaled
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by blueheart on
Friday, 2nd April 2004 @ 09:34:36 AM AEST
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| Another powerful write. Great, I loved it. |
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Re: Frost Impaled
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by Hurretje on
Tuesday, 6th April 2004 @ 06:37:35 AM AEST
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Chilling and dark, full of despair. What a beautiful sad combination you made of these things. I like it so much!
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