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Locked
Contributed by
Hurretje
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Tuesday, 30th March 2004 @ 07:47:53 AM in AEST
Topic:
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LOCKED
I’M IN MY ROOM.
HARD GRAY OUTSIDE.
SOFT YELLOW INSIDE.
THE WIND BLOWS…
LIQUID UNIVERSES CRASH UPON MY TWISTED VIEW ON WHAT I CALL
…MY WORLD…
TRIVIAL, VOLATILE, UNNOTICED, LIKE
MY THOUGHTS
MY DESIRES
MY WORDS…
MUTTERED IN
…UTTER SILENCE…
…HESITATING…
…GAINING CONFIDENCE…
…GROWING STRONGER…
PERFORMING…
TO MY EVER ATTENDING AUDIENCE THAT
NEVER CRITICIZES
NEVER CORRECTS
NEVER SUPPORTS
NEVER APPLAUDS
I GO OUT.
A high-potential
YOUNG MAN, THE WORLD IS AT YOUR FEET
AN EMPTY COVER
My flat eyes
...MIRROR THEIR EXPECTATIONS…
My hollow words
…TICKLE THEIR IMAGINATION…
My vacuous actions
…SATISFY THEIR NEEDS…
-IT’S COLD UP HERE
SOMETHING IS MOVING
INSIDE
BUBBLING
EXPLORING MY
…INNER WALLS…
IT
…CRIES…
I DO NOT..HEAR...
IT
…SCREAMS…
I CUT IT…DEAD..,
YOU’RE SUCH A FINE LAD
MY EYES
…MIRRORING…
My hollow words
…TICKLING…
My diligent actions
…SATISFYING…
…GRATIFYING…
…INDULGING…
…RISING…
…REVOLTING…
PREVAILING
-THANK YOU
BACK AGAIN
SOFT YELLOW UNIVERSE
WOMBED
SAFE
ALL MOIST GRAYNESS EXCLUDED
ALL COMES OUT
NOTIONS
LONGINGS
TRUTH…
SWEETY, DINNER’S READY
-WON’T BE A MINUTE
…
ACKNOWLEDGED
RECOGNIZED
HEARD
THIS MAN I AM, OUT OF HIS
…PRISON CELL…
HIS DAILY
Ventilation hour
Copyright ©
Hurretje
... [
2004-03-30 07:47:53]
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Re: Locked
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by Avarice_Riot on
Tuesday, 30th March 2004 @ 09:12:17 AM AEST
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| Wow. You managed to make a stunning impact even with so few words in a line...kudos to you. |
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Re: Locked
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by AnGeL_M on
Tuesday, 30th March 2004 @ 10:19:20 AM AEST
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A Very Stunning Impact :-)
I Had To Agree With Avarice On The Stunning Part:-)
This Was Really Good
Loved It :-) Keep Em Coming....
{{{{{ Hugs }}}}}
,,,,,,,,,,,,LoVe,,,,AnGeL,,,,,,,,,,,,,
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Re: Locked
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by Necromant on
Tuesday, 30th March 2004 @ 01:51:05 PM AEST
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What a frustrated poem! The messege is cristal clear! Great write!
Anne :D |
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Re: Locked
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by emystar on
Friday, 16th April 2004 @ 05:33:11 AM AEST
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Very impressive, powerfull write.
Luv, huggs,
emy |
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Re: Locked
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by emystar on
Monday, 7th June 2004 @ 02:09:31 AM AEST
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Very D
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p,
also creative.
luv, huggs,
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