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Mannequin
Contributed by
EternitysLyre
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Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 07:06:37 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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The sunlight bars locked time away
Inmpounded hope in shadow's stray
Two bleary eyes by sight replayed
He searched for green in ocean's gray
The acid tears he never shed scoured the last remains
The hurt replaced what never was, his smile by spotlight sprained
The center of his silent play, dead sparrows on window panes
A seat for all the truly sane, the mocking gaze on his throughts trained
--For what he sold he'd bought an world of pain--
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2004-03-29 07:06:37]
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Re: Mannequin
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 07:20:20 AM AEST
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This poem is acutely descriptive, elegant and alluring to my sensibilities and I am glad that you have penned it. Such vivid images; spotlights, dead sparrows, grey seas and bleary eyes . . . beautiful and poignant theme, written with your trademark ability.
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Re: Mannequin
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 07:44:34 AM AEST
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Radiant, elegant, despondent, bleak..and all in nine lines. Rich flow, and so full of life--Your talent is ever-growing, my friend.
Truly,
-V.S. |
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Re: Mannequin
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by Avarice_Riot on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 10:10:18 AM AEST
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| Oh my goodness....that is one heck of a poem. It's very sad and tragic and the choice of wording is excellent. Kudos. |
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Re: Mannequin
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by STRaNGe_LiNDSeY on
Saturday, 3rd April 2004 @ 09:00:11 PM AEST
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this was an amazing poem that was so full of elegant emotions and wonderful use of style.
Lindsey |
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Re: Mannequin
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by AnGeL_M on
Friday, 9th April 2004 @ 06:55:53 AM AEST
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Very Descriptive ..... Sad Write Though But Written Well...
********LoVe**AnGeL*********
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