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The Observer
Contributed by
Hurretje
on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 06:38:58 AM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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From a distance
Drifting clouds
Scrape ever changing green
And black and white wipes
From afar
Hunting sun beams
Catch the buzzing crowd
Under many-colored sun-shades
In the distance
Flagellating waves
Infest the shores
With the moribund cachalot's lament
So far way
Persisting desert winds
Invade our ears
With dying children's sandy tears
In my ivory tower
I behold the world yonder
Through the World Wide Web
But I keep the windows shut
Copyright ©
Hurretje
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2004-03-29 06:38:58]
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Re: The Observer
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by venkat on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 06:56:23 AM AEST
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| soo well done..venkat |
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Re: The Observer
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by AnGeL_M on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 07:06:28 AM AEST
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Beautiful Just Absolutely Marvelous
Great Write....Loved It....Keep Em Coming
And Thanks For Your Comments On My
Work As Well....
,,,,,,,,,,,,,LoVe,,,,AnGeL,,,,,,,,,,,,, |
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Re: The Observer
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by silent on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 08:06:46 AM AEST
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Wonderfully expressed with such an array of images, well done. very well done
Silent |
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Re: The Observer
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by Avarice_Riot on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 09:13:39 AM AEST
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| Well-written and an interesting subject. I like :) |
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Re: The Observer
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by JennyFruFru on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 01:23:29 PM AEST
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| very vivid... nice :) |
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Re: The Observer
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by Necromant on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 01:37:55 PM AEST
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Awesome poem!!!! Really astonishing!!!
Anne :D |
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Re: The Observer
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by arden on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 01:56:21 PM AEST
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just awesome. i really like how you wrote this. just beautiful to read. loved it.
Arden |
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Re: The Observer
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 02:08:06 PM AEST
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Hmn. Hunting sunbeams? I approximated that idea in my head on friday night, but forgot about it, along a dreamy commute. Perhaps for a reason, because I doubt I would have come up with as good a poem as this at the time. Nicely appropriated.
Well done. |
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Re: The Observer
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by Baronhawk on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 03:49:37 PM AEST
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| Ahh the fabled observer of things.... you could have been writing of me it seem... an advice to this protagonist..this observer...go out once a whiles... stewing does not do the prune good... let it bake in the sun... I know from experience that being an observer is great but you lose out on participation in things...anyway that's my take... nice expressive write. I connected to it for I am an onserve per se. |
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Re: The Observer
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by SugimotoYouki on
Thursday, 29th April 2004 @ 09:10:06 AM AEST
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well done..
you created nice imaginare pictures... |
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Re: The Observer
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by Cynthia on
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| This is a very nice creative write. Well done Hur. *S* Cynthia |
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