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The Fallen
Contributed by
Cobalt
on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 12:59:11 AM in AEST
Topic:
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I've tried and
I've cried.
They come and go.
No one stays forever.
I know
you gave all
that you had.
How many times
will I
fall from grace?
How many times
did I
fall to my knees?
You gave all that you had.
I failed
all I ever loved.
I lied.
Was it all
meant to be?
Will it just
float away like
the end of time?
I cried and begged
please hold my hand.
Don't let me fall
again.
Am I here again?
Will I fail
this time?
I let you go,
come running back.
So scared on
my own.
Why can't I
just leave this
alone.
It won't seem
to leave me be and
it just keeps
dragging me down.
Pictures flash
of times
I used to
know so well.
But in the end
it all just fades
away from me.
Falling under
swept away by
this life of mine.
I always seem to
fall right
when you
need me the most.
And my whole world
seems to keep
bringing me down.
Raven's Sin
Copyright ©
Cobalt
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2004-03-29 00:59:11]
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Re: The Fallen
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by STRaNGe_LiNDSeY on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 03:56:10 AM AEST
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| i like your style of writing... where it's broken and confusing... it makes me read it like 3 or 4 times before i can form an opinion. thanks :) |
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Re: The Fallen
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by Avarice_Riot on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 04:11:14 AM AEST
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| Another great poem from you....it's sad but intriguing at the same time. |
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Re: The Fallen
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by MoonlitAngel on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 04:38:37 AM AEST
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This spoke to me like none of your other poems have. Every word rang a little bell in my mind. So sadly beautiful, I love this one!
~ Moonlit |
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Re: The Fallen
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by Necromant on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 06:06:54 AM AEST
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What a teary poem!! Really expressive, so much bitterness!! *sigh* Awesome write!!
Anne :D |
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Re: The Fallen
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by LovingWhispers on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 04:45:14 PM AEST
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I love your style too :D
Sad words,exhaustive feelings.Turrmoil of the heart reeks such havoc hun but gives life to an excellent piece!!
Great work
Sharon |
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Re: The Fallen
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 05:18:29 PM AEST
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Excellent write!! The run-on lines are perfectly done.....
Jenni |
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Re: The Fallen
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by afraid_of_fear on
Tuesday, 20th April 2004 @ 08:33:33 AM AEST
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I love this style.. it goes especially well with the general poem content and of course the title.. Very nicely done..
charlotte x_x_x |
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