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When You Were In Despair
Contributed by
MyLastBreath
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Sunday, 28th March 2004 @ 12:17:50 PM in AEST
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When you were in despair
I watched the stars
Fall out fo your eyes
Your world fell apart
I wanted to pick up
The shattered pieces
But there were just too many
My heart bled for you
I wanted to give you my hand
But I couldn't reach that far
And I saw the stars
Fall out fo your eyes
But all I could do was stare
And you're falling
But it's hard for me
To even stand up
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2004-03-28 12:17:50] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: When You Were In Despair
(User Rating: 1 ) by arden on
Sunday, 28th March 2004 @ 12:27:39 PM AEST (User
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oh i very much enjoyed this! beautifully written. i loved this. well done keep up the awesome work.
Arden |
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Re: When You Were In Despair
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Sunday, 28th March 2004 @ 12:36:28 PM AEST (User
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Paints a sad, but vivid picture. A small annoyance is the 'fo' - its either from or of, I can't decide.
Good poem, though. |
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Re: When You Were In Despair
(User Rating: 1 ) by JennyFruFru on
Sunday, 28th March 2004 @ 12:53:26 PM AEST (User
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FAllen stars paint such a sad picture of beauty. Nicely done :) |
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Re: When You Were In Despair
(User Rating: 1 ) by Necromant on
Sunday, 28th March 2004 @ 03:42:54 PM AEST (User
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Oh I really enjoyed reading it a lot. Its a bit saddening though, the wording is great!
Anne :D |
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