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Shedding Blood
Contributed by
srugglingyoungster
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Sunday, 28th March 2004 @ 05:53:58 AM in AEST
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The Tears fall helplessly,
my hope fades away,
I drop the knife and
stare at my wrist.
The Shedding Blood,
the pain arising,
How in the heck could
i take it this far.
The world around me is
a very faint blur
i can hear the ask questions,
but i cannot respond.
I fall to the ground,
The blood still sheds,
how could you let
me do this?!
Yes, its not your fault,
im shedding blood,
and falling tears.
Or wait, maybe it is.
The memories, they
taunt my brain dead mind.
You let m hurt me,
how could you
let it go this far.
Copyright ©
srugglingyoungster
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2004-03-28 05:53:58]
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Re: Shedding Blood
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by silent on
Sunday, 28th March 2004 @ 05:58:34 AM AEST
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I love it, paints quite a morbid but true picture. very good indeed.
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Re: Shedding Blood
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by JennyFruFru on
Sunday, 28th March 2004 @ 05:59:29 AM AEST
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| Its sad when our emotional pain because physical pain especially when we do it unto ourselves.... its like weve reached the depths of despair.... and are searching for a way out. Ive been there and can relate. it caputures the feelings very well..... :) |
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Re: Shedding Blood
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by srugglingyoungster on
Sunday, 28th March 2004 @ 06:04:10 AM AEST
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| yeah. well keep in my mind, i only write it. Im in my early teens and havent commited suicide yet, but pressure has built up on the issue of it. |
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Re: Shedding Blood
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by gothicangel on
Sunday, 28th March 2004 @ 07:17:58 AM AEST
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Hi there!
Great poem!
I am a teenage myself and I can see myself in that poem as much as you do, I am sure. Life is so hard, It is hard to wake up every morning when you are not looking forward to anything!
Well, maybe you can read some of mine, they are about the same:P
Great poem, and good luck.
..::Goth::.. |
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Re: Shedding Blood
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 28th March 2004 @ 09:33:45 AM AEST
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when i was a teenager i wanted to be dead by the time i was 25! i'm just glad it didn't happen.
'cause as you get older those good and bad experiences you learn from.
Makes you sort of appreciate life!, enjoyed the poem by the way!
wildejohnny. |
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Re: Shedding Blood
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by bernard on
Sunday, 28th March 2004 @ 10:17:58 AM AEST
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| Good write but remember we all go through such phases. I myself sometimes suffer from depression and I will not tell you what goes through my head at times. I am 74 and you are so young I hope that sonshine will flodd into your young life and lift you up into other higher realms all the best from bernard. |
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Re: Shedding Blood
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by WorthlesSanity666 on
Sunday, 28th March 2004 @ 10:40:17 AM AEST
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| Great write! Sounds like me the other week! You made a very detailed image in my mind. Good job! I know you may not believe this, for I did not, but there are ways to help the way you feel. Just hang in there! Just keep writing! |
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