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To the Moon - A Werewolf's Prayer
Contributed by
Hurretje
on
Thursday, 25th March 2004 @ 07:15:28 AM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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All the lights are out
I drift without direction
I turn and tumble
Into the depth of the sea
Into the void of my mind
Can you guide me through the night?
Can you guide me, baby?
Will you lead me to the light?
Will you lead me, baby?
All my senses are put out
I head to nowhere
I shatter and fracture all
Who are in my way
That is in my course
Can you guide me through the abyss
Darker than a tomb by night?
Will you lead me to redemption
Quicker than a ray of light?
These flashing comets
That evaporate my mind
With stroking violence
They invade me, kiss me, hate me
More and more, till all is white
Can you guide me through the fire?
Can you guide me, baby?
Will you lead me to desire?
Will you lead me, baby?
Your blood's rushing through my veins
With utter passion
Fire extinguishes my soul
Until all is lost
In silent ashes
Can you guide me through the flames
Hotter than my heart on fire?
Will you lead me out of hell
Outrun my strange desire?
Where is the Sun?
Merciful Goddess!
She's lost - Divine portress
In the desert of my dying spirit
I cry
She fades
I can't recall
Her face
Where is the Sun?
Sheltering fortress!
The Moon - Evil temptress
Stained memory in my lost soul
I howl
She blinds
I can't endure
Her face
Let me lead you to the fire
Of this never quenched desire
Let me bring you to the light
Of the Goddess of the night
Hail Moon!
Hail Moon!
Copyright ©
Hurretje
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2004-03-25 07:15:28]
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Re: To the Moon - A Werewolf's Prayer
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by venkat on
Thursday, 25th March 2004 @ 07:41:31 AM AEST
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| mmm very dark, chillingly beautifull, its very rare piece in its kind...excellent. venkat |
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Re: To the Moon - A Werewolf's Prayer
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by dAWn on
Thursday, 25th March 2004 @ 09:17:04 AM AEST
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I don't know what type of a critic you expect now, so don't take me very seriously (just a rookie, just signed up today)...
Very dark with that certain 'spark'.
*nods*...
I like.
I certainly do...mhm |
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Re: To the Moon - A Werewolf's Prayer
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by AnGeL_M on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 07:24:13 AM AEST
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WoW Another Wonderful Write...
WoW!!!!!!!!!!!!! God I Wish There
Were Some way Of Holding Out My Hand
And Touching Yours So I Could Have
That Magical Touch In Writing..................Hugs.....
,,,,,,,,,,,,LoVe,,,,,AnGeL,,,,,,,,,,,, |
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Re: To the Moon - A Werewolf's Prayer
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by Avarice_Riot on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 10:40:31 AM AEST
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| Cool, that was dark, eerie but still intriguing. Well done. |
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Re: To the Moon - A Werewolf's Prayer
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by JennyFruFru on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 01:25:42 PM AEST
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| this is great ... i really love the way you vividly describe things in all your poems ... :) |
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Re: To the Moon - A Werewolf's Prayer
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by Necromant on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 01:30:36 PM AEST
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WoW!! I love Werewolfs!! Awesome poem!! You're really talented keep it up!!!
Anne :D |
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Re: To the Moon - A Werewolf's Prayer
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by Cynthia on
Saturday, 17th April 2004 @ 11:39:28 AM AEST
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| WOW!!!!!!!! Wonderful write. So intriguing. I love werevolves. Excellent, just excellent. *S* Cynthia |
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Re: To the Moon - A Werewolf's Prayer
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by Kittenfantastico on
Friday, 7th May 2004 @ 09:42:38 AM AEST
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| Just Purrr-fect!!! |
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Re: To the Moon - A Werewolf's Prayer
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by bws71 on
Monday, 22nd January 2007 @ 02:03:07 AM AEST
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| I only comment on poems I really like so please take my critique as a compliment. I love the beginning and end of this poem. Awesome images, very powerful. The stanzas where you pose questions to the reader and especially where you refer to the reader as baby are a little distracting. Maybe this is meant to be a song and heard sung may have a very different effect. But reading it, I found those elements distracting from the pace and run of the poem. Great stuff though. So good it deserves to be even better. Some poems aren't worth the effort. This one is. |
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