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Masquerade: Death's Serenade
Contributed by
EternitysLyre
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Wednesday, 24th March 2004 @ 10:36:06 AM in AEST
Topic:
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He lies away his wonderland and smothers all his dreams
He drowns his joy with emptimness and tenses at the seams
For no facade is strong enough to wall emotions in
In life's parade this nobody's another could-have been
He cons into tomorrow
Mirth simmers from his smile
Wither bitter joy he's borrowed
And sadness can beguile
A grinning man none understand nor hear tip balance beams
Behind his laugher (it's midnight after) none can hear his screams
Dripping hands so deeply red, he's knee-deep in his sins
His mind slaughtered a million smiles and killed his innocence
Sleep steals away tomorrow
His watch an iron vise
The ticking shrieks in sorrow
To fail before you've tried
Yet never once wil he admit his isn't just fatigued
He'll curl his lips in false repreive (by lies remain beseiged)
A smile full of easy calm and swagger with no heed
Yet hear his eyes and feel his lies--
You're watching his soul bleed
A hearty laugh so callow
His smile denies he's cried
Still swaying on his gallow
Hear dripping tears all dried
A liar not so shallow
From sweetest death deprived
--Before he'd lived he'd died--
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EternitysLyre
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Re: Masquerade: Death's Serenade
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by Rous on
Wednesday, 24th March 2004 @ 10:59:29 AM AEST
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Sounds like you know my nephew. He could be your poem. Very well done.
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Re: Masquerade: Death's Serenade
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Wednesday, 24th March 2004 @ 11:27:22 PM AEST
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While born from depression, this is still as elegant as they come. It still amazes me how well you harness the elements of rhyme and meter, and spin them into an emotional work of art. I can find no fault with this, and can relate to it. Thoroughly good, deep, thought-provoking write.
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Re: Masquerade: Death's Serenade
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by STRaNGe_LiNDSeY on
Saturday, 3rd April 2004 @ 09:03:46 PM AEST
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one word comes to mind... BRILLIANT! Thank you so much for sharing your talent with us here.
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Re: Masquerade: Death's Serenade
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by Rakerman1999 on
Saturday, 10th April 2004 @ 04:34:50 PM AEST
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Well EL.....There are few poems that make me sit back and say " My god..this person can write ! " This is certainly one of them.
I loved your choice of words in particular, and the perfection of the entire work as a whole.
Soon as you're 18 I owe ya a drink
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Re: Masquerade: Death's Serenade
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by deadreckoning1983 on
Friday, 20th August 2004 @ 03:47:57 AM AEST
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| You my good person are about as good a lymrist as i have ever heard. your use of words and contexts makes me jealous. touche. (excellent write by the way) |
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