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In The Blink Of An Eye... One Brief Moment In Time
Contributed by
kidpoet_213
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Tuesday, 23rd March 2004 @ 07:48:44 PM in AEST
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Since we've gone our separate ways
Life for me has not been the same
The loneliness... the sadness... the despair
Now rules my life... my every care
My days are filled with staring into space
As the happy moments roll... before my face
Reliving what we had...
My memories are now living in the past
In the blink of an eye... one moment in time
Sadly... I felt your love for me die
As it floated away on the angry winds of strife
Gone...
In the blink of an eye... one brief moment in time
Lord... I wish I could go back...
Take back every angry word ever spoken
Every misdeed ever done
But those moments... have come... have gone
In the blink of an eye... one brief moment in time
I still love you so...
This you must know
You're in my thoughts... you're in my dreams
Both day and night... anywhere in between
My only wish... is to have you back in my life again
I'm sorry for all that was done... that was said
I pray... you'll forgive me... one day soon
If only... in the blink of an eye...
For... one brief moment in time
Life's too short... to go on without you in my life
I'm scared...
But scared of what?
Living? Dying? Loving you?
I don't know what to do...
With all my memories of you?
I guess... I'm afraid...
Afraid... I'll never find anyone to love again...
Afraid... they'll love me... then leave me too
In the blink of an eye... one brief moment in time
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Re: In The Blink Of An Eye... One Brief Moment In Time
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by Remy on
Tuesday, 23rd March 2004 @ 08:00:32 PM AEST
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repeating themes of hearbreak gets to be numbing, but nevertheless this is lovely writing... ;0)
~Remy~ |
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Re: In The Blink Of An Eye... One Brief Moment In Time
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by Jackee_line on
Tuesday, 23rd March 2004 @ 08:05:44 PM AEST
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I disagree with remi. This is a very well written piece and the repeated phrase only emphasize it that for one brief moment... if we were allowed, it would change everything.
Excellent work. |
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Re: In The Blink Of An Eye... One Brief Moment In Time
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by neglected1 on
Tuesday, 23rd March 2004 @ 08:19:01 PM AEST
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I think that repeating the main subject is sometimes not needed.. but in your situation you did a good job in corresponding it all together.. i know exactly what you are talking about.. it tells a story all on its own .. you worded it to the best of your ability and the rest took hold.. thats the true test right there.. outstanding work..
keep up the good work!!
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Re: In The Blink Of An Eye... One Brief Moment In Time
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 23rd March 2004 @ 08:36:22 PM AEST
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| wonderful poem and i find it good on you that you put yourself inside anothers feelings, truely poeticly artistic, keep writing:) hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: In The Blink Of An Eye... One Brief Moment In Time
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 23rd March 2004 @ 08:40:28 PM AEST
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I think that you did an excellent job here. It is not easy writing this kind of piece if you have not lived it. If you have, you realize every emotion penned. Good work here.
Rita |
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Re: In The Blink Of An Eye... One Brief Moment In Time
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by blueheart on
Tuesday, 23rd March 2004 @ 10:44:24 PM AEST
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| Nice. The love, frustration and regret shone. |
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Re: In The Blink Of An Eye... One Brief Moment In Time
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by JennyFruFru on
Tuesday, 30th March 2004 @ 05:45:17 PM AEST
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| i can relate... i have the same fears and the same feelings... be strong :) this is beautiful... and it flows very well |
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