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Crystal Army
Contributed by
Hoots
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Sunday, 21st March 2004 @ 01:38:35 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Again I tempt your willing eyes
With instant need they see Me,
Your mind will fill with pretty lies
Of how tomorrow you won’t need Me.
I’ll hide inside your thoughts, your mind
You’ll think I’m gone, I’M NOT,
Pretty lies say you’re not the kind
Of soul I love to rot.
I’ll invade your every perception
To make things go My way,
Still you’ll lie with defiant aggression
That My visit will last…just ONE more day.
Soon My invasion will consume you
Your every waking moment, then even as you sleep,
I’ll help you think of things you’ll do
For My company, you now crave to keep.
I’ll possess every moment of your mind
Until again at last we meet,
Until that moment you’d wished Me gone
After you think Me so sweet.
You will start to hate the night
Even more than your hate for day,
You’ll even hate Me and wish Me from sight
But adamantly I will stay.
In the morning again you’ll love Me
As soon as we reunite,
I’m your only true friend, you see
Til Misery visits your pillow at night.
She’s one of many friends I’ll show you
She has many things to sell,
She knows the task She’s here to do
Above the Others, She does it well.
I would not leave you lonely
So the friends I call will come,
Depression, Desperation, Dementia
There are many, I only name some.
Your soul still tries to touch you
Not yet willing to give up the fight,
'He’s evil, Dark and Deadly'
It whispers to you through the night.
Misery feels the spark that threatens
To take your soul from Me,
Unconcerned, yet She hastens
To invoke Insanity.
Insanity whispers and treads lightly
Until He’s certain He’ll stay,
He labors soft and soothes quietly
As again your night turns to day.
The morning finds you without care
Misery and the Others have flown,
Insanity is selfish, and once He’s there
He will rule your mind alone.
No one left to torment you
With lies that I am vile,
Memory leaves but just one thing to do
As I see your reflection…I smile.
Copyright ©
Hoots
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Re: Crystal Army
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by bobotheclown on
Sunday, 21st March 2004 @ 02:39:23 AM AEST
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wow this was mesmerizing... it sounds as if you write from personal experience due to the amazing clarity. You've really opened my eyes as to how bad this drug is. Thnx for sharing this.
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by DreamWeaver on
Sunday, 21st March 2004 @ 03:07:29 AM AEST
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| Wow, this is an awesome write ... three words - depth, insight, talent ... Jan |
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by Coaster on
Tuesday, 23rd March 2004 @ 11:21:41 PM AEST
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| Wow, very good poem. You have talent. |
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Re: Crystal Army
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by ConfusedPancake on
Monday, 5th April 2004 @ 10:20:20 PM AEST
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| most long poems lose my attention...just for shere boredom of the subject. but you for some reason have managed to captivate the details of this drug in such length and yet still keep me entertained. quite the skill. |
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Re: Crystal Army
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by TwEeK on
Sunday, 6th June 2004 @ 07:09:49 PM AEST
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i like how you portraid the drug as if its a person, great work, sounds like you know alot about this drug, or you just figure this is what its like.
good job!
Tweeky |
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Re: Crystal Army
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by blackholesun on
Sunday, 3rd October 2004 @ 09:27:42 AM AEST
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wow what a verry inspirational poem,
what can i say?it was the best! |
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Re: Crystal Army
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by Rxqueen on
Monday, 11th October 2004 @ 08:10:20 PM AEST
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| So true. It was such a great poem. And applies not only to meth... I really loved it. |
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Re: Crystal Army
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by FatherTom on
Monday, 11th October 2004 @ 11:31:25 PM AEST
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A powerful write and one you most certainly drew from personal experience to compose.
Meth was my drug of choice over twenty years ago. It started with a bit here and and bit there to get through working the graveyard shift. I wasn't long though before it became much more and began to wreak havoc on me and all that I loved in this world. Your insights are eerily accurate and brought back many memories, most of which are uncomfortable to say the least.
Luckily for me I had an awakening of sorts and while it took me much longer than I care to admit I found recovery and made it back from the abyss. While I still carry many emotional scars from the damage I did to myself and those that I love I am convinced an angel was on my shoulder throughout my addiction because in retrospect my actions should have resulted my death. To this very day I have many regrets as related to the time I lost to this drug but at the same time am grateful to be alive.
You poem provides insight as related to the ravaging a mind, body, and spirit endure while under the control of drugs. You are very talented poet and this poem is outstanding work.
I hope you have found recovery in your life as well. Your poem should serve as daily inspiration to anyone fighting the demons of addiction.
And that angel? Still on my shoulder ;) |
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Re: Crystal Army
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by Undeadsuperstar on
Monday, 20th December 2004 @ 06:15:19 PM AEST
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its rare that i see something that makes me think, Christ, this is awesome. This poem has accomplished it. I know that its about meth, but i guess that the characteristics of addiction are similar for each substance.
The progression from some here and there to an all consuming force is really powerful. This poem is indeed a work of genius, |
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Re: Crystal Army
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by Nardo on
Sunday, 13th February 2005 @ 12:08:30 AM AEST
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WOW! TAKE MY ENTIRE BEING AWAY!!!!
I just posted a piece called "The Beast in my Eyes", about withdrawl, and the need to score VS. getting through the day.
I GIVE YOU A STANDING OVATION!
This is TRUELY a work of ART!
Nardo |
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Re: Crystal Army
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by Scarlett on
Tuesday, 15th February 2005 @ 07:32:44 AM AEST
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enthralling - never tried crystal meth but i cna relate this to other stuff too.
i liked it how you portrayed the drugs as people - very effective! |
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Re: Crystal Army
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by PainfulSpirit06 on
Thursday, 21st April 2005 @ 01:11:42 PM AEST
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| I like your display of this drug as a person. I really don't have much to say because I've had to deal with drugs since I was brought into this world because I was a crack baby. |
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Re: Crystal Army
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by Live2Die on
Tuesday, 26th April 2005 @ 07:32:20 AM AEST
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| One word, wow. Everything about this poem is wonderful. You express wat the drug can do very well, so I think you've had personal expeirence, that which I am sorry for. I still love this poem though. Its the ones like these that can really help people. =) |
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Re: Crystal Army
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by Lemmonhead on
Saturday, 30th April 2005 @ 06:28:16 PM AEST
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| thanks for sharing, good realistic poem, I smile at the reflection too, thanks |
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Re: Crystal Army
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by jeza on
Monday, 23rd May 2005 @ 09:51:01 PM AEST
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this is an amazing poem & it is very sad
huggs
Jeza |
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Re: Crystal Army
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by Rikki on
Friday, 17th June 2005 @ 12:11:47 AM AEST
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| I was a heroin addict for two years till I moved to Iowa, then became a meth addict for a short time. It didn't last long because I like sleep and like food even more, but this can pertain to any addiction, even a relationship with a partner, perhaps. If you don't already, I would suggest listening to a song from Tool called H. The lyrics written in that song are equivalent to the way you wrote in this poem. Very well done, Rikki |
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Re: Crystal Army
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by aprillie on
Sunday, 31st July 2005 @ 07:56:50 PM AEST
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| I assume you experienced this or someone close to you did. I dont know what it is let, nor do i wish to. |
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Re: Crystal Army
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by kerrah681 on
Sunday, 11th September 2005 @ 12:22:35 AM AEST
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| Quite honestly meth is-was my drug of choice and thats exactly where I write from too, damn though, excellent work, You had to have been high when you wrote this......just kidding maybe not, but its really intriguing, I got high reading it myself, you should read my poem Asylum of My MIND, its tweakerized, but I feel the same way as you do.........Great poem, really its pretty amazing. |
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Re: Crystal Army
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by angryhippylibral on
Wednesday, 26th October 2005 @ 09:34:42 PM AEST
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Gorgous and honest.
It's sad, sick, and oh-so-true.
I hope for your sake that you don't know what it feels like.
Take care,
Bella |
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 4th January 2006 @ 02:00:31 PM AEST
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| an amazing poem and very well written. |
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by axeman on
Friday, 19th May 2006 @ 08:15:00 PM AEST
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| beautiful poem..While i was trying to read it i noticed that i couldn't keep my attention on the poem,my attention was going towards my hands and what i was holding. on my left a pipe and my right a lighter... I hate the fact that i understand your poem and know that every thing in it is true. |
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by detourchick on
Monday, 27th November 2006 @ 05:19:29 PM AEST
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| insane really good |
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by SunshineySam on
Wednesday, 11th August 2010 @ 07:32:45 PM AEST
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| This is phenomenal. The flow of the poem is wonderful. The personification is amazing. Love it. |
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Re: Crystal Army
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by Dibi on
Wednesday, 27th April 2011 @ 07:43:00 PM AEST
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| beautiful, long poems can often be a bore, thats why i keep them short and sweet, but this poem is such a high standard!!! kept me reading till the end, keep up the good work |
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