|
 Menu
|
|
|
|
|
Social
|
|
|
|
|
Pieces Of The Other Woman
Contributed by
pumpkinpie
on
Sunday, 21st March 2004 @ 01:33:07 AM in AEST
Topic:
oops
|
Scarlet blush and strawberry gloss
Stiletto heels and peppermint floss
Flaxen locks, a temptress gaze
Crimson lips,a face ablaze,
Are pieces of the other woman.
Golden skin on white sheer dress
The touch of wealth her fingers press
A heart commited to her own behalf
Euphoric smiles through joyous laughs,
Are pieces of the other woman.
A helpless child,a starving mother
Her baby blues sparkle as they suffer
A shattered dream,unstable future
Her curves rejoice the life obscure
Are pieces of the other woman.
Hatred spinning out of control
Fragments restored inside her soul
Vindictive heart, malicious needs
Wrath sprouting through her hatred seeds,
Are pieces of the other woman.
I've warned you once,I've warned you twice
The vixen will make you pay the price
You still succumbed to your salicious desires
And now condemned you'll be in her infernal fires
Copyright ©
pumpkinpie
... [
2004-03-21 01:33:07]
(Date/Time posted on
site)
Advertisments:
|
|
|
|
|
|
Sorry, comments are no longer allowed for anonymous, please register for a free membership to access this feature and more
|
|
All comments are owned by the poster. Your Poetry
Dot Com is not responsible for the content of any
comment.
That said, if you find an offensive comment, please
contact via the FeedBack Form with details, including poem title
etc.
|
|
|
Re: Pieces Of The Other Woman
(User Rating: 1 )
by Rakerman1999 on
Sunday, 21st March 2004 @ 02:19:53 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Wow....you came back to us with a vengence didnt you? This is so powerful and so very well written it leaves me gasping. Very well done
Roses
Larry |
|
|
Re: Pieces Of The Other Woman
(User Rating: 1 )
by DreamWeaver on
Sunday, 21st March 2004 @ 02:55:19 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| Awesome write pumpkin ... your talent shines in this .... Jan |
|
|
Re: Pieces Of The Other Woman
(User Rating: 1 )
by Necromant on
Sunday, 21st March 2004 @ 09:57:55 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Wow what a poem! My my very well expressed! What a sad ending well its all bitter. Great write!!
Anne :D |
|
|
Re: Pieces Of The Other Woman
(User Rating: 1 )
by twinkletoes on
Sunday, 21st March 2004 @ 08:47:25 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
thought provoking......i like the style of this poem. very interesting ending, with good imagery and subject matter throughout woven with a touch of sadness. i should be bold and say very good insight, but I won't. I'll say good perseption of humanity instead.
tt |
|
|
Re: Pieces Of The Other Woman
(User Rating: 1 )
by venkat on
Monday, 22nd March 2004 @ 01:17:43 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Wow..great..its a talented and powerful write..
venkat |
|
|
Re: Pieces Of The Other Woman
(User Rating: 1 )
by AnGeL_M on
Tuesday, 23rd March 2004 @ 08:50:19 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Awesome Write
Loved It....Although My Comment
Might Not Mean Nothing To Ya
After That First Comment I
Left Ya On That One Poem..
.I Totally Didn't
Mean It The Way I Wrote It..
And I Really Do Apologize...
I Understood The Poem
Very Well...It Was Really A Great Write
But I Think We Both MisUnderStood Each Other...Hope You'll Find It
In Your Heart To Forgive Me...
,,,,,,,LoVe,,,,,AnGeL,,,,,, |
|
|
Re: Pieces Of The Other Woman
(User Rating: 1 )
by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 23rd March 2004 @ 10:45:45 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| excellent, this line says so much too, "A heart commited to her own behalf".. so well written, do keep penning with your flowing poetry:) hugs n' love nessa |
|
|
Re: Pieces Of The Other Woman
(User Rating: 1 )
by PumpkinPie on
Tuesday, 23rd March 2004 @ 11:19:06 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Thanks Angel for your comment on this poem,as for the other comment you're apologizing for I think you're mixing me up with someone!:)
PumpkinPie |
|
|
Re: Pieces Of The Other Woman
(User Rating: 1 )
by Stitch on
Wednesday, 24th March 2004 @ 01:34:08 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Ok, let me catch my breath. Awesome stuff.
Stitch |
|
|
Re: Pieces Of The Other Woman
(User Rating: 1 )
by WordPoet on
Friday, 9th April 2004 @ 03:24:23 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
You say out loud, "I told you so" but to yourself you say, "I care".
Nice write... |
|
|
Re: Pieces Of The Other Woman
(User Rating: 1 )
by emystar on
Friday, 13th August 2004 @ 10:27:39 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Sad but unfortunatly true in lotsa cases when money is involved.
Great writing. U have your own unique way of writing which is good.
huggsm smiles,
emy |
|
|
Re: Pieces Of The Other Woman
(User Rating: 1 )
by Overstated on
Monday, 16th August 2004 @ 12:49:43 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Nice ending!!! I love the intelligent rhyming couplet to finish the poem off.
Wow what a powerful piece you end up hating the other women yet the poem gives us some indication of the other women’s motivations and why she is the way she is. I thought this poem was really really good you really got on a roll with this one it felt like the poem came together in the palm of your hands. If that makes sense!
|
|
|
Re: Pieces Of The Other Woman
(User Rating: 1 )
by Spazzo on
Saturday, 8th January 2005 @ 02:59:00 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
Powerful poem.
Spazzo |
|
|
Re: Pieces Of The Other Woman
(User Rating: 1 )
by Taurusgem1 on
Monday, 7th February 2005 @ 01:03:28 AM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
I loved this peice, After your comments on mine I was compelled to read some of your work I have to say you have a delicate brillance to your writting. Keep it up
Page |
|
|
Re: Pieces Of The Other Woman
(User Rating: 1 )
by Former_Member on
Friday, 16th September 2005 @ 08:31:36 PM AEST
(User
Info | Send
a Message)
|
| wow, powerful with a wonderful imaginative flare & style. Five stars? Not enough. |
|
|
|
· 
Poetry
Community
Members
Areas
Reference
Search
Top
Others
