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Please Call
Contributed by
remy
on
Thursday, 18th March 2004 @ 01:48:49 PM in AEST
Topic:
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hey i want to go home, don't ask what that's about
i'm looking for something, can't quite figure it out
while we're on the phone i'm sitting in my bedroom
i know that you won't get through with the reception...
well still you can call
but don't ask me what's wrong
and if it looks like i'll fall
come along.
so the days get set, it's like we never met
but you don't leave my head, even as i dream in bed
that's the best i can describe on how my day went
i'm not really hellbent on some sort of collection...
grave thoughts are fleeting, looking so much better
as the days grow brighter, won't have to remember
this fickle heart is beating at rates much stronger
not too much longer we'll bypass all the contraptions
well still you can call
but please don't ask what's wrong
and if it looks like i could fall
come with me as i go along
oh please you know you can call
even when i fall...
well i know you are set right in the place you need to
could you look in my face and just know i believe you
are the star in my sights so forget when i take plight
i might land down on someday but for now i still say
i want to go to you place, all the same as before
for even more of the reasons, not deluded anymore
i've believed in so many things but not enough in you
oh but now i do and i soon need to see you...
well still you can call
but don't ask me what's wrong
and if it looks like i'll fall
come to me as we go along
oh please you know you can call
why do you ask me what's wrong?
and if it happens that i fall
come along.
Copyright ©
remy
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2004-03-18 13:48:49]
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Re: Please Call
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Thursday, 18th March 2004 @ 03:34:06 PM AEST
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aww.... this feels sorta sad but it's beautifully written!
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Re: Please Call
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by Kie on
Thursday, 18th March 2004 @ 03:36:28 PM AEST
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| I was teetering between okay you want this person to call but you don't? Or call me but don't ask me stuff? Hopefully they'll just call you! Kie |
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Re: Please Call
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by jc_92024 on
Thursday, 18th March 2004 @ 03:41:09 PM AEST
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| It was cool i liked it alot caught my attention, you captured feelings that many people have during life |
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Re: Please Call
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by DreamWeaver on
Friday, 19th March 2004 @ 02:47:29 AM AEST
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| Your jumbled emotions are so evident here ... I can imagine this as a great song ... well written ... Jan |
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Re: Please Call
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by venkat on
Friday, 19th March 2004 @ 02:51:39 AM AEST
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"i've believed in so many things but not enough in you...oh but now i do and i soon need to see you..".. thats good..
well done..venkat
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Re: Please Call
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by Cynthia on
Tuesday, 23rd March 2004 @ 05:30:40 PM AEST
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| This is a sad write, but it's beautiful. I liked it. *S* Cynthia |
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Re: Please Call
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by Overstated on
Tuesday, 23rd March 2004 @ 06:34:33 PM AEST
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| If this was a song it would be a cool acoustic little number - felt very honest which is always a good thing and i found myself giving it all my attention... |
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Re: Please Call
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by AnGeL_M on
Tuesday, 23rd March 2004 @ 08:27:45 PM AEST
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Great ~ Write
But A Little On The Sad
Side.....But Very Well Done...
,,,,,,,,,LoVe,,,,AnGeL,,,,,,,,,, |
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