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DESPERATE GROUND
Contributed by
rhymeandreason
on
Wednesday, 17th March 2004 @ 10:30:32 PM in AEST
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My trail led out of wilderness,
a goat path headed down.
For years somehow I had stood the test
of mining desperate ground.
Now with rifle cradled like a child,
and pistols here and there.
With eyes this world had not beguiled.
That had a look that said: "Fair's fair.
I came down off my mountain
when several shots cut loose.
I reigned my horse still, spun him round,
gave him both my boots.
He scrambled to the trails first bend.
and with a spank to the flank while jumping.
I turned and shot that first fool.
By God, a levered carbine's something! They gave up on the ambush,
now they'd turn their thoughts to sneaking.
I knew they would try and work a flush,
it set my brain to thinking.
Once five to one, now four to gun,
for they're not through with me.
Then, one dashed,
I shot, he crashed,
and i'm just hunting three.
Then a nervous voice said; "Toss your gold.
We'll let it go at that!"
I dropped down, crawled, half circled sound,
and kept my body flat.
I rose behind that nervous voice,
now sounding ill at ease.
I said; " Bushwackers pay is lead, not gold."
As my finger squeezed.
The other two, was of one mind.
I guess they'd had enough.
I never saw their faces.
Lord, they rode their ponies rough.
I gentled out my mount.
Nudged him heading down.
That night I fed him oats.
That night I slept in town.
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Re: DESPERATE GROUND
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 17th March 2004 @ 10:56:02 PM AEST
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This is an excellent piece of work. I have to say I was enthralled from beginning to end. You do have a flowing pen. Marvelous!!
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Re: DESPERATE GROUND
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by Kie on
Wednesday, 17th March 2004 @ 11:04:58 PM AEST
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I have to agree with Rita this really was enthralling to read. A fabulous, well constructed story and I didn't want it to end.
I've always been fascinated with these types of reads. My dad use to tell me stories about rangers and in my mind I was one and I could do all the fancy gun tricks, smoke a cigar and jump on my horse---spurs a ridin...
I am thinking this would make a great short story or maybe a part 2? I hope so...
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Re: DESPERATE GROUND
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by Ilhar on
Wednesday, 17th March 2004 @ 11:25:03 PM AEST
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good flow well written very enjoyable
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Re: DESPERATE GROUND
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Wednesday, 17th March 2004 @ 11:43:23 PM AEST
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Very enjoyable read...My fav poet used to write poems like this all the time...and that's what made him my fav... I just love these stories..
Jenni |
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Re: DESPERATE GROUND
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by AnGeL_M on
Thursday, 18th March 2004 @ 12:54:46 AM AEST
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I'll Have To Agree With Ev1 On This Poem
Great Write........
,,,,,,,,,,LoVe,,,,,,AnGeL,,,,,,,,,, |
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Re: DESPERATE GROUND
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by DreamWeaver on
Thursday, 18th March 2004 @ 04:15:37 AM AEST
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| Excellent write!~ I enjoyed this immensely ... you have a gift for writing ... Jan |
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Re: DESPERATE GROUND
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by Necromant on
Thursday, 18th March 2004 @ 12:14:51 PM AEST
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What a well written poem! Its sort of remind me one of Wilfred Owen's poems. Its really amazing! Wow....can't express in words how much I enjoyed reading it. Keep it up!
Anne :D |
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Re: DESPERATE GROUND
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by emystar on
Saturday, 20th March 2004 @ 05:49:04 AM AEST
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Very good work indeed. It's like watching a western on t.v.
U should write for the movies.
luv, huggs,
emy |
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