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No more Colour
Contributed by
TwEeK
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Wednesday, 17th March 2004 @ 11:45:39 AM in AEST
Topic:
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These eye's of mine,
have seen to much,
Pain and bloodshed,
have crossed my face,
Misty blue eye's ,
full of pain and worry,
These eye's seen,
the beauty of sunset glow,
Blue grey eye's,
deep and smokey with sadness,
My eye's have seen,
the evil's and pain others cause,
I have gone blind,
won't see no more colour,
All is black and grey,
the colour's of my broken life,
These eye's of mine,
have seen to much.
Copyright ©
TwEeK
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2004-03-17 11:45:39]
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Re: No more Colour
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by LiquidChaos on
Wednesday, 17th March 2004 @ 12:16:14 PM AEST
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| cool concept. i like the way you used color to discribe feelings you have. keep writing! |
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Re: No more Colour
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by Kie on
Wednesday, 17th March 2004 @ 12:17:09 PM AEST
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| This poem was awesome, descriptive and filled with emotion. Well done.... Kie |
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Re: No more Colour
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by kidpoet_213 on
Wednesday, 17th March 2004 @ 01:39:56 PM AEST
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I echo the two previous comments... I like ur style of writing... Keep up the good work..
~Donna~ |
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Re: No more Colour
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by jamsters on
Wednesday, 17th March 2004 @ 01:49:10 PM AEST
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I'm confused. (Not all poems have to rhyme) I liked your poem though.
* Jamesters * |
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Re: No more Colour
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by jamsters on
Wednesday, 17th March 2004 @ 01:50:35 PM AEST
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I'm confused. (Not all poems have to rhyme) I liked your poem though.
* Jamesters * |
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Re: No more Colour
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 17th March 2004 @ 02:57:16 PM AEST
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This type of work is called 'prose'. Poetry does not have to rhyme. Rhyming can get very tiresome after a while. This was penned very well with great style and emotion.
Rita |
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Re: No more Colour
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by WorthlesSanity666 on
Friday, 19th March 2004 @ 09:44:51 PM AEST
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| Oh yes! Sooooo awsome!!! I like this one best!!! great write, very emotional. You described your emotions very well even w/o rhyming. I've never been good at rhyming... Sorry, that doesn't have to do with what i'm talking about, lol! Great job, keep up the wonderful work! |
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