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Wrongly Picteresque
Contributed by
Avarice_Riot
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Monday, 15th March 2004 @ 01:05:49 AM in AEST
Topic:
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I love you most when I don't know you
In the dark, where sight is blind
and you are only there by touch.
A breath, a scent, a whisper are all
it takes to melt me into crystalline
drops of lifeblood for you to drink.
But is the one who takes me really you?
Or just the person I want you to be?
I've lost all sense of focus when
it comes to deciphering you.
I've come to know the stranger in
your eyes even better than the truth
you choose to lock behind your heart.
A dreamer's vision is not always
enough to gain the life you want
And I want so badly to unchain your doors
But you keep holding me back on the edge
Until I begin to feel I fear your truth.
I love the alien in you
I can't help my weakness
This is only a shadow of my despondency
I can't go, I can't leave
Not when I still love
the stranger in you.
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Avarice_Riot
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Re: Wrongly Picteresque
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by lil_angel on
Monday, 15th March 2004 @ 01:14:24 AM AEST
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| Wow really good! I hope the best for you! |
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Re: Wrongly Picteresque
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by blueheart on
Monday, 15th March 2004 @ 03:38:08 AM AEST
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| This is an awesoem poem, Avarice. There are times when I love the starngers in people too. |
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Re: Wrongly Picteresque
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by venkat on
Monday, 15th March 2004 @ 06:56:41 AM AEST
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This is amazingly beautiful ..
here I see very sensuous line:
" to melt me into crystalline drops of lifeblood for you to drink."...and here I read very brilliant line: "A dreamer's vision is not always
enough to gain the life you want"..
Best of luck..venkat
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Re: Wrongly Picteresque
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by Kie on
Monday, 15th March 2004 @ 04:23:37 PM AEST
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| This left me breathless. I don't believe i've ever read a poem quite like it. WOW is all I can say.... Kie |
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Re: Wrongly Picteresque
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by emystar on
Monday, 15th March 2004 @ 09:50:03 PM AEST
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Good work. Makes a person think.
luv, huggs,
emy |
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Re: Wrongly Picteresque
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 16th March 2004 @ 09:44:20 PM AEST
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| excellent poem, i thought i knew someone too and it turned out his love was with too many conditions and not a truelove, i hope for you this love is lasting and genuine:) hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Wrongly Picteresque
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 22nd March 2004 @ 06:58:21 AM AEST
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i loved the whole concept there's a stranger in all of us, my father used to come out with an old saying when we were children "never show your hand" and sometimes you have to be like that in life, or the enemy gains the advantage!
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Re: Wrongly Picteresque
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by Hurretje on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 10:31:37 AM AEST
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Wow, this is the best poem of you I have read so far! Sometimes holding on to a dream, especially when you know the truth is (too) painful is the only way to show mercy to yourself and the other.
Great work!
Hur |
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Re: Wrongly Picteresque
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by Stitch on
Tuesday, 30th March 2004 @ 09:59:46 AM AEST
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Oh, this is good. It is that mystery in a person that we love and the person that we dream they are. We don't want to see the reality. You've captured that well.
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