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It never would.
Contributed by
EternitysLyre
on
Sunday, 14th March 2004 @ 10:21:37 PM in AEST
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My heart sinks a little lower each day
In a weight born of fatigue that no words can assay
It's moments like these when the wind chills my bones
When illusional breezes make me feel I'm alone.
The clenching ache resounds within
When lament ends, anguish begins
To man's hurray and death's chagrin
The lifeless hollow to both akin
The empty body craves a soul
THe struggle needs a cause
The wand'rer seeks a destination
The sorrow wants a pause
For nothing is eternal
Someone slayed the albatross
While death kills pain infernal
Fire slain by frost
Though things amass as time flows past
Everything's a loss--
Copyright ©
EternitysLyre
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2004-03-14 22:21:37]
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Re: It never would.
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by morelikelyrics on
Sunday, 14th March 2004 @ 10:34:44 PM AEST
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wow... give me a sec... ... ... ok...
It took a while for that one to sink in.
That was amazing... just pulls you in...
Sad, yet very very moving...
If only i had the amassing powerful phrases
you use... Just keep writing away, there's no
point to ending your beautiful array of words...
Great write!! |
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Re: It never would.
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Monday, 15th March 2004 @ 06:12:20 AM AEST
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Again, you knock me to the floor. Your imagery is bested only by the depth and sheer grace of your phrases; the rhymes employed, the words you carefully choose, and how it always comes together as a vivid, thought-provoking jigsaw.
Crafted with expertise and the most gifted of pens.
Truly,
-V.S. |
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Re: It never would.
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by venkat on
Saturday, 20th March 2004 @ 08:13:23 AM AEST
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| Ha..young man, this is wonderful..venkat |
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Re: It never would.
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 31st March 2004 @ 06:48:07 AM AEST
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Rhymed with such class, with studious metering, as always. I'm struggling to work out all your lessons, so, from time to time, I come around your neck of the woods and have a gander at your stuff.
Needless to say this one's a sure-fire poetic tutorial, if ever I saw one . . .
Thanks for writing. |
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