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Butterscotch Contemplation
Contributed by
afraid_of_fear
on
Saturday, 13th March 2004 @ 03:43:26 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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The sun's rays dance upon my tainted skin,
Burning through to the hurt within;
Shattered by earth's hidden laughter,
My heart knows not what it's after,
Struggling to understand the reason behind happiness and pain,
And why I feel wonderful again,
The moonglow radiates my strife,
As I contemplate my life,
Contemplating the origin and future of my soul-
Trying to fnd the missing pieces with which to make it whole.
Cold winds enwrap me and dark clouds hover above,
And yet the sun returns again to show much love.
I let my soul play amongst the meadows’ flowers and trees
As I watch my pain blow away with the breeze
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Re: Butterscotch Contemplation
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by lil_angel on
Saturday, 13th March 2004 @ 04:22:22 PM AEST
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| Good job! This is wonderful! Keep them coming! |
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Re: Butterscotch Contemplation
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by Jackee_line on
Saturday, 13th March 2004 @ 04:50:56 PM AEST
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Excellent write, very positive.
Well done. |
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Re: Butterscotch Contemplation
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 13th March 2004 @ 06:34:03 PM AEST
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| well, charlotte, your welcome, but i just gave your muse a jumpstart lol, it was a pleasure spending time with you, hugs n' love nessa x |
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Re: Butterscotch Contemplation
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by ToriVeigh on
Saturday, 13th March 2004 @ 07:42:29 PM AEST
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| Beautiful write! Rhyming, rhythm, a flow from beginning to end. Great job! |
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Re: Butterscotch Contemplation
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by Merry on
Saturday, 13th March 2004 @ 09:13:35 PM AEST
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a lovely write with an uplifitng message of hope wrapped in a perfect verse....
daisy*merry |
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Re: Butterscotch Contemplation
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by lovingcritters on
Saturday, 13th March 2004 @ 10:55:10 PM AEST
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I just loved the line "As I watch my pain blow away with the breeze. That's sublime indeed!
What a marvelous write....and with Nessa to help you....she her self is so fine with the poetry.
This was beautiful, a very enjoyable read
consue |
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Re: Butterscotch Contemplation
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by Kie on
Saturday, 13th March 2004 @ 11:37:52 PM AEST
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| Everything you said is true. LOVED the title, the context of the poem, the ending. Excellent write, I commend you. Kie |
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Re: Butterscotch Contemplation
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by arden on
Sunday, 14th March 2004 @ 11:22:10 AM AEST
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this was soooo good charlotte! i loved it. i really like how everything flows together so beautifully. wonderfully done. great write by a great writer.
your friend.
Becky |
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Re: Butterscotch Contemplation
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by Rakerman1999 on
Tuesday, 16th March 2004 @ 03:25:26 PM AEST
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How very inspirational and refreshing. Beautifully written.
Very well done
Roses
Larry |
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Re: Butterscotch Contemplation
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by bobotheclown on
Friday, 19th March 2004 @ 06:41:26 PM AEST
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title doesn't seem to fit, but the poem itself was great. Rhyme scheme was awesome as well. I hope u get out of yer writer's block soon.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: Butterscotch Contemplation
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by blueheart on
Sunday, 13th June 2004 @ 08:51:32 AM AEST
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I loved the title but why butterscotch?? lol
I liked the way you ended the poem with much hope and how all the pain was blown away. Beautiful poem!! |
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