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Hunting at night
Contributed by
Cobalt
on
Friday, 12th March 2004 @ 09:13:42 PM in AEST
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I scream at the moon
and tell you to run.
Smelling your blood already
I can taste your fear.
Watch you turn to flee.
Seeing you go wild trying
to get away and survive.
My hunger had grown so much
so I brought you here to dine.
Waiting till you were out of sight
to begin the hunt.
Hey the chase is over half the fun.
I begin to walk relishing
the beginning of this primal game.
The smell of your fear lingers in the air.
My excitement grows quickly
and I begin to run.
Feeling your mind ahead of me
and seeing the path you took
I begin to seek my prey, my prize.
Anticipating catching you and
fantasizing what I'd do
I didn't realize you had hid.
You hit me with the rock
and followed with a branch.
I grinned at this and knocked
you down sending the branch flying.
I smiled at you sadistically
exposing all my teeth.
I wanted you to scream
but it caught in your throat.
Disapointed picked you up
and slammed you into a tree.
Still no sound escaped your lips.
Biting hard into your shoulder
tasting your sweet blood
finally eliciting a scream.
I wait for it to end
staring into your eyes.
You stop and begin to beg
for your life.
I smile and say ok and
that I'll let you go.
Backing up just enough
for hope to enter your
eyes to crush it.
I bring my lips to your
neck as you begin to cry.
I say thanks for my
dinner as I begin to feed.
Raven's Sin
Copyright ©
Cobalt
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2004-03-12 21:13:42]
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Re: Hunting at night
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by Cynthia on
Friday, 12th March 2004 @ 09:48:33 PM AEST
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| WOW! You did a great job. I like this. Scary. *S* Cynthia |
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Re: Hunting at night
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Friday, 12th March 2004 @ 11:46:14 PM AEST
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Lol.....did you whistle after?? Just curious...:>)
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Re: Hunting at night
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by Kie on
Friday, 12th March 2004 @ 11:53:20 PM AEST
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I have dreamt something similiar to this before and it is TERRIFYING.
"I can taste your fear.
Watch you turn to flee.
Seeing you go wild trying
to get away and survive."
This stanza gave me chills. Fear and running, yet all the while knowing you will die. Haunting really.
Although when I got to the ending I wondered if it was about a vampire. There is something animalistic and enticing about vampires... But thats another story....
*Sighs*
Kie
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Re: Hunting at night
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 13th March 2004 @ 02:00:11 AM AEST
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| good grief jeff, so many things come to mind, where do i start? love the images, love the vivid detail, i have been stalked in real life and you artfully creeped me out which few can do; when i think of it as a human, -when i think of it as a vampyre, werewolf ect. it just captivates me, (read it 4 times cause i liked the thrill) but i still think your one sick puppy, *just smile* hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Hunting at night
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by AliB on
Saturday, 13th March 2004 @ 02:58:48 PM AEST
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How could you not comment on this, it was excellent! Reminds me of some horror movies I've seen, the anticipation of "what next". Bit creepy, but powerful stuff, I'm impressed, well done.
Ali xx |
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Re: Hunting at night
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by Remi on
Sunday, 14th March 2004 @ 01:21:14 AM AEST
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that sound so creepy, this does kinda remind me of a vampire or werewolf movie but it real good thou
remy |
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