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Sweet lullaby
Contributed by
neglected1
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Thursday, 11th March 2004 @ 09:02:15 PM in AEST
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Lie in wait for the presence of comfort
Throwing rocks into an old creek
Oh sweet, sing to me
Rock a by baby
Lurking in the shadows
Reflection of things i don't want to see
Oh sweet, sing to me
On the tree tops
Conduct yourself with selfishness
Trickling thunder arises
Oh sweet, sing to me
When the wind blows
Carry out enthusiastic feelings
Wholesome thoughts tumble
Oh sweet, sing to me
The cradle will rock
Cleave to secrets of nothing
Hold in tears like endless meanings
Oh sweet, sing to me
Sing me your sweet lullaby
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Re: Sweet lullaby
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by Levi on
Thursday, 11th March 2004 @ 09:06:41 PM AEST
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| Wow. Talk about above my head. I need to learn to read this stuff. It is facinationg. Your writing is excellent, it follows a general no pattern pattern. Not stuck to the odl ABBA ABAB styles of writing. Defintaly sweet and caring. But I'm at a loss. Can only get better by reading I always so. But for now. This is great. I love it. Even though I don't understand it. |
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Re: Sweet lullaby
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by ladyfawn on
Thursday, 11th March 2004 @ 09:10:15 PM AEST
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| love this, keep writing:) hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Sweet lullaby
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Thursday, 11th March 2004 @ 09:19:24 PM AEST
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Nothing worthless about the mind from which this poem came.... Believe in yourself...
You write well.
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: Sweet lullaby
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by gery_giggles on
Thursday, 11th March 2004 @ 09:20:09 PM AEST
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ooooo!...i likes!..it is so different and i love how the last lines r part of the lullaby..good work!
luv always |
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Re: Sweet lullaby
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by SkYYBLu on
Thursday, 11th March 2004 @ 09:39:37 PM AEST
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| I love the symbolism and stuff and I am NOT just saying that. This poem is REALLY good...keep it up! |
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Re: Sweet lullaby
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 12th March 2004 @ 01:12:05 AM AEST
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I really like your style of writing here, for a worthless mind your a bloody good poet!
wildejohnny. |
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Re: Sweet lullaby
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by Luka on
Monday, 20th December 2004 @ 06:57:39 PM AEST
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| god damn, how is your mind worthless, this poem was amazing, i completly awed after reading this, keep it up, you could be big someday |
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