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A Wisp of Death
Contributed by
TheDerangedCivilian
on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 12:10:52 PM in AEST
Topic:
DarkPoetry
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The silver needle pushes through
She slips into a drowsy state
A blotch of black ink clouds her mind
Swirling tendrils of darkness sweep her up
Cradling her gently
Envelopping her slowly
Cloaking her limp corpse
Until
She drops into a dreamless sleep
From which
She will never wake
Her mouth stays opened
She draws her last breath
The one syllable word she tries to utter
Ready on her tongue
Sticks to her mouth
A crackling sound that protrudes
Is extinguished
Her voice
Put out
Never
to be heard
Again
Copyright ©
TheDerangedCivilian
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2004-03-09 12:10:52]
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Re: A Wisp of Death
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by LouisaMontagu on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 01:13:45 PM AEST
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hummm,!! yep Its brill...
Can c where u were goin with that.
Take a bow
Louiza xx |
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Re: A Wisp of Death
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by deathdrop on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 03:20:17 PM AEST
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year, i like it!
what gave you the inner urge to write such a thing? |
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Re: A Wisp of Death
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by PoeticRequiem on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 03:42:55 PM AEST
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AHHHH! Heroin is a beautiful thing. Great write interesting.
PoeticRequiem
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Re: A Wisp of Death
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by WorthlesSanity666 on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 05:25:30 PM AEST
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Great job Pokey!!!! Wonderfully written. I look forward to reading more of your work!!! :D I'M SOOO HAPPY YOU FINALLY FIGURED IT OUT!!!!
~Gigi~ |
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Re: A Wisp of Death
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by Honey56 on
Sunday, 1st October 2006 @ 05:07:06 PM AEST
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Your brilliance prevails...
Great poem...
honey56 |
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