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Poem 1 Silken thread
Contributed by
sircolin
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Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 09:08:13 AM in AEST
Topic:
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You have sown a silken thread round my heart
Your voice is off an angel.
You take you thread off silken and weave it round my heart with love.
You hands are like silk
As you weave your thread off love .
You take my body and weave it with yours
We are now sown together for all time
You have woven us together with your silken thread
The thread off love
By colin moorcock
Copyright ©
sircolin
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2004-03-09 09:08:13]
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Re: Poem 1 Silken thread
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by Stitch on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 12:41:29 PM AEST
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The silken thread around the heart is lovely, like a coccoon. You need to do more with it though. There's a bit too much repetition. Try to whittle it down to the original thoughts. A good start.
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Re: Poem 1 Silken thread
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by Remy on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 06:31:01 PM AEST
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aww, gorgeous... see what home economics is good for?!? lol, this is pretty. i like it! ;0)
~Remy~ |
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Re: Poem 1 Silken thread
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by Remy on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 06:31:19 PM AEST
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aww, gorgeous... see what home economics is good for?!? lol, this is pretty. i like it! ;0)
~Remy~ |
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Re: Poem 1 Silken thread
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by poetrygodslove on
Sunday, 4th April 2004 @ 09:02:26 AM AEST
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| WHAT A BEAUTIFUL POEM AND A BEAUTIFUL YOU TO WRITE LIKE THIS. I bet the masterpiece turned out beautiful. sandy |
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