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Screaming at Nothing
Contributed by
Cobalt
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Monday, 8th March 2004 @ 11:20:36 PM in AEST
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Falling down
I've lost my mind
Just can't seem to decide
To laugh or scream though
I think I'd like peace of mind
Seems so far away from me
Going under again I guess
Can't seem to help but drown
No longer able to just relax
And unable to unplug
Too much always
Running through my head
Without release or salvation
Think I'd rather die
The knife whispers to me gently
Promising me escape from this
Hand is trembling at the thought
But it still makes me sick
Wanting nothing more
Than to cut and drink
My life away
Try to turn away yet
Still it whispers sweetly to me
Like a black hole
No release and no escape
My hope is swallowed whole
Nothing able to save me now
Raven's Sin
Copyright ©
Cobalt
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2004-03-08 23:20:36]
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Re: Screaming at Nothing
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by Cynthia on
Monday, 8th March 2004 @ 11:23:47 PM AEST
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| What a dark write. I hope you are ok. *S* Cynthia |
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Re: Screaming at Nothing
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by Stalkee on
Monday, 8th March 2004 @ 11:24:21 PM AEST
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| very cool poem...awesome job...i loved this...Stalkee |
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Re: Screaming at Nothing
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 8th March 2004 @ 11:30:29 PM AEST
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| Wow, awesome write. I enjoyed this. Awesome. |
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Re: Screaming at Nothing
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by Avarice_Riot on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 01:31:26 AM AEST
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| Intense write, you described it really well until I felt I was going through what you were. Kudos. |
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Re: Screaming at Nothing
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by DreamWeaver on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 01:41:04 AM AEST
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| I relate to nearly every line in this poem ... an awesome write ... Jan |
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Re: Screaming at Nothing
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 01:54:11 AM AEST
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I don't generally read 'dark poetry' but this title caught me and pulled me in. I have had times in my life where I wanted to scream at anything but not know exactly what to scream at. That primal need to extinquish that burning flame in your gut with an animalistic primitive scream of inner pain. This is an excellent piece of work.
Rita |
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Re: Screaming at Nothing
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by venkat on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 03:11:54 AM AEST
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"The knife whispers to me gently....still it whispers sweetly to me like a black hole"..excellent imagery..emotional and intense.. venkat
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Re: Screaming at Nothing
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 10:31:27 AM AEST
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deep and emotional.. another beautiful write!
charlotte x_x_x |
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Re: Screaming at Nothing
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by Kie on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 01:33:25 PM AEST
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| This is a very powerful write. There is something magnetic about the dark side inside of us. I have no answers why it calls and there is a temptation to get lost in it or succumb to it. Make sense? Writing is a great form of expression for emotions and thoughts. You did a great job constructing this one. Kie |
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Re: Screaming at Nothing
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by Remi on
Thursday, 18th March 2004 @ 12:01:53 PM AEST
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God that sound my life all the time but very dark and I like it so good write
remi |
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