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Contributed by
poemwritingdude
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Monday, 8th March 2004 @ 10:46:20 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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The darkness is so quiet
In the calm of the night,
Without the sound of your heart beating
my heart slowly fills with fright.
And this fright is not of monsters,
Or a scary ghost or two,
But it’s that I might spend my entire life
with just memories of you
And the next time that love comes around,
Which I’m never sure it will,
I will show that all I need
is for this deep hole to be filled,
This deep hole is the darkest place
Where no one ever goes,
my loneliness stays here,
and it’s the only place I know.
And because of all this loneliness
That’s building up inside,
I feel as if I should run away
to a place where I can hide
because inside of this hiding place
It will all endure the same,
As it once did in the real world,
Where loneliness remained
But the moon will fade
And the sun will rise
On this lifetime of rejection
and half-heard cries
And the stars will all remain
buried deep up in the sky,
and the one that I will wish upon
I still hope I will find.
And you are my great telescope,
To point me to the light,
and that is why I dream of you,
Every single night.
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poemwritingdude
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2004-03-08 22:46:20]
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Re: You
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by kayald on
Monday, 8th March 2004 @ 10:58:05 PM AEST
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| This one is really good and powerful too, I really like the analogies you use and the way you place the words, it makes it deeper |
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Re: You
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by Kie on
Monday, 8th March 2004 @ 11:19:11 PM AEST
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| Beautiful beyond words. Flowed perfectly. I believe this is the first poem I have read of yours and I am extremely impressed! Awesome! Kie |
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Re: You
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 8th March 2004 @ 11:31:04 PM AEST
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This is so beyond good! This is magic. This piece absolutely deserves accolades.
Rita |
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Re: You
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 12:31:59 AM AEST
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| Hey there just wanted to comment you on your poem. It is so beautiful and well spoken. Keep up the good work. |
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Re: You
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 9th March 2004 @ 05:05:54 PM AEST
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| Brando you a poem freak hahaha |
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Re: You
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 17th March 2004 @ 06:18:19 PM AEST
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| GR8 POEM!!!! brown you are sooooo good! |
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Re: You
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by faith_my_eyes on
Thursday, 17th June 2004 @ 10:16:58 PM AEST
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| beautiful write I hope your ship finds its compass soon. |
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