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Spirit Of Life
Contributed by
tashban
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Friday, 5th March 2004 @ 02:19:51 PM in AEST
Topic:
spiritual
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I’m chasing a feeling yet I can’t see a thing
It’s dipping and diving like a bird on a wind
The closer I reach it the further I feel
To finding the answer of what is so real.
Am I dreaming a life of how I should be?
Or living a dream of what I should see
I look for the key to open my doors
In the hope I am guided to discover my flaws
What am I looking for when I find the key?
A spiritual presence to set me free
To open my mind, set free my love
Of countless lives I’ve experienced above.
Is it a means to an end to discover my light?
Or an endless lesson to improve my might
To cast any shadows across my door
And learn to love and hate no more.
What can I learn from the spirit of life?
To open my mind, focus the light?
Discover new worlds which are oceans apart
Yet in a blink of an eye I’ve travelled by far.
I wait for that feeling........ in time it will come
The spirit released my journey begun
When I emerge from this darkness
Set free in flight and discover my presence
In the spirit of life..
Copyright ©
tashban
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2004-03-05 14:19:51]
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Re: Spirit Of Life
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by MrWrite on
Friday, 5th March 2004 @ 03:35:27 PM AEST
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| I really enjoyed reading this poem. The imagery was wonderfully done, and I've had an experience like this, so I kind of understand what you're trying to say. Well written, and well worth the read. Great job. |
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Re: Spirit Of Life
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by Lionel on
Friday, 5th March 2004 @ 04:39:09 PM AEST
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Very Good-PGL - Change second line to- a bird on the wing. I'd change "might" to sight.
Just suggestions, still a supurb poem.
God Bless |
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Re: Spirit Of Life
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by Lionel on
Friday, 5th March 2004 @ 04:41:09 PM AEST
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Very Good-PGL - Change second line to- a bird on the wing. I'd change "might" to sight.
Just suggestions, still a supurb poem.
God Bless |
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Re: Spirit Of Life
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 5th March 2004 @ 06:56:27 PM AEST
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good write, You have a great spirit for life!
And a good sense of humour(lasts nights chat)
look forward to reading more of yours
wildejohnny. |
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Re: Spirit Of Life
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by positivelypurple on
Saturday, 6th March 2004 @ 12:17:51 AM AEST
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| Lovely write and so inspirational and uplifting! Excellent! |
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