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He fell
Contributed by
Cobalt
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Wednesday, 3rd March 2004 @ 01:20:30 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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He fell and
head met ice.
Out cold he lay.
Hurt and disoriented.
We heard.
We cried.
We hoped.
He didn't know...
His name.
His wife.
His sister.
He is different.
He is angry.
We got him back
closer to home.
He hit his head again...
We cry again.
We don't know
what to do.
His children
my cousins.
Tears burn my face
they scald my eyes.
My uncle.
Unsure future.
He doesn't know
our faces.
We cry.
It burns.
We hurt.
He fell...
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Re: He fell
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by ShadowDaughter on
Wednesday, 3rd March 2004 @ 01:26:20 AM AEST
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Gods . . . I'm so sorry. What you and your family must be going through . . . I don't know what to say . . . my thoughts and --dare I say it?-- prayers will be with him. Forgive the innocuous-ness of the words, but I hope everything turns out okay.
Beautiful poem. Poignant and powerful, with a certain grace in its simplicity.
Goddess bless.
Nora |
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Re: He fell
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by lil_angel on
Wednesday, 3rd March 2004 @ 02:10:34 AM AEST
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| Wow this is so sad....well written but sad...good luck. Send me an im if u need some one to talk to. |
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Re: He fell
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by kalika_vidya on
Wednesday, 3rd March 2004 @ 02:34:18 AM AEST
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| very sad..well expressed.. K |
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Re: He fell
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by Avarice_Riot on
Wednesday, 3rd March 2004 @ 02:59:04 AM AEST
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| You must get this a lot, but what else can I say except I'm so very sorry to hear about this. I can't even begin to imagine what you must be going through. What I really liked about this poem is how each line only uses an average of three words yet can still have so much of an impact. Incredible poem, kudos. |
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Re: He fell
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by venkat on
Wednesday, 3rd March 2004 @ 04:37:57 AM AEST
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| Ooh..cobalt..I am very sorry..it is really disheartening. venkat |
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Re: He fell
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by a_bear on
Wednesday, 3rd March 2004 @ 05:27:35 AM AEST
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I don't know what to say..it's sad, but beautifully written.
I have seizures that cause severe memory loss...sometimes I don't recognize my family or friends..
I see a puzzled look on their faces...and a sad look. I regain my memory in a day or two..but it's a terrible and frightening thing. It's nice that you can share. |
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Re: He fell
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Wednesday, 3rd March 2004 @ 08:43:33 AM AEST
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this is so poignant, it brought tears to my eyes... my grandfather is like this too after a fall, I know how it feels.
Hope things are better for you soon
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Re: He fell
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 3rd March 2004 @ 08:55:34 AM AEST
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Tragic....I am so sorry to hear this and my prayers are with him.
Larry |
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Re: He fell
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by Kie on
Wednesday, 3rd March 2004 @ 09:09:55 AM AEST
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I hope the damage is not permanent. I am sorry to hear of this pain your uncle and family are going thru. I will keep you all in my thoughts. It is my fervent wish that he returns to his old self.
Kie |
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Re: He fell
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by afraid_of_fear on
Wednesday, 3rd March 2004 @ 10:21:55 AM AEST
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I was waiting for some more submissions by you and you submitted loads since i last checked! and they're all great..
and then you wrote this.. and its so sad.. i hope all will be okay with your family..
charlotte x_x_x |
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Re: He fell
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by Stalkee on
Thursday, 4th March 2004 @ 12:39:29 AM AEST
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| this is so sad...you wrote it well...good job |
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Re: He fell
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by poetrygodslove on
Friday, 5th March 2004 @ 05:17:38 PM AEST
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| my heart goes out. and know that he will be fine again.. I pray. sandy |
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