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He took it
Contributed by
jc_92024
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Tuesday, 2nd March 2004 @ 03:27:47 PM in AEST
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He takes a breath
Then grabs a knife
He looks at death
Not seeing his life
He starts to cry
Wanting the pain away
He wishes to die
Not to live another day
He clears his throat
Then pressing knife against skin
He clenches his fist
Knowing he’s not going to live
He watches the blood flow
From the ripping of his skin
He sees his soul go
Out and away from him
He now knows he’s gone
That there’s no coming back
He can’t comprehend what he’s done
To make him slip through the crack
He now sees people crying
Asking why’d he have to take it
He knows there’s no returning
To his old life that he quit
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Re: He took it
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by Remy on
Tuesday, 2nd March 2004 @ 03:31:52 PM AEST
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Interesting... subtle meanings seem to seep through your words, i like that!! ;0)
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Re: He took it
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by arden on
Tuesday, 2nd March 2004 @ 03:32:04 PM AEST
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i really like this. i really like how its written to. wonderfully done, awesome job keep it up
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Re: He took it
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by Kristina_Simpson_Stewart on
Tuesday, 2nd March 2004 @ 03:39:46 PM AEST
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well written. good piece. thanks for sharing
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Re: He took it
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by Kellros on
Tuesday, 2nd March 2004 @ 04:03:21 PM AEST
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| Suicide... a emotional pain that becomes physical reality... sometimes things can't change, there are things that can't go back or change no matter how much you try... i've had experience with people with these notions... it's really emotional... thanks for the write, keep thinking of them too, they are also human :) |
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Re: He took it
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by Quilted_rag_doll on
Tuesday, 2nd March 2004 @ 04:38:38 PM AEST
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Amazing! I really liked it! Good wording, nice write. Very discribtive, lots of emotion (not a bad thing)! Overall, awsome!
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Re: He took it
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by perfection on
Wednesday, 3rd March 2004 @ 01:20:44 AM AEST
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that has really good emotion. It makes it sound like you are the one that went through it step by step.
xoxo |
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