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Referee
Contributed by
remy
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Tuesday, 2nd March 2004 @ 02:53:18 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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i'm sick of playing the middle line
choose another referee to keep you this time
i wouldn't mind if i could believe
that it would mean something... or do anything
you call the shots right upon each other
hoping i'll choose sides as here comes another
face your grumblings now you'll understand
this is out of my hands... it's in your hands
weigh out the consequence
forget about it making sense
who could i try to please?
you broke me on chin and knee
coordinate the pinpoint of every spark
chew my insides as you leave me tainted marked
but don't ask me again, "what is wrong?"
i can't play this off... i won't play that song
you know and i know and everybody knows
you come together to stake another fighting blow
don't you see you both break my heart?
won't you see this part... tearing me apart
weigh in the consequence
forget why it all makes sense
who could i try to please?
you break me so poignantly
so perfect, we're friends now
so painful, don't ask how
you want it, you need it
i've had it, forget it
presumptious, preempted
post-pardon, redempted
so save face, diluted
don't hold me you convoluted fools...
wait for consequence
what works i hope makes sense
who could i try to please?
just please don't break me
Copyright ©
remy
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2004-03-02 14:53:18]
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Re: Referee
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by Kellros on
Tuesday, 2nd March 2004 @ 03:34:44 PM AEST
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| I dun know your exact position in this, but it is written with a strong sense of direction... good write :) |
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Re: Referee
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by lil_angel on
Tuesday, 2nd March 2004 @ 05:20:46 PM AEST
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| This is really good! You have a great talent! |
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Re: Referee
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Tuesday, 2nd March 2004 @ 06:42:27 PM AEST
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| good write...very expressive...I like :) |
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Re: Referee
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by Kie on
Tuesday, 2nd March 2004 @ 10:04:31 PM AEST
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| This poem was awesome. Thought you expressed yourself clearly and from the title to the ending i enjoyed every word. Kie |
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Re: Referee
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by Rakerman1999 on
Wednesday, 3rd March 2004 @ 12:31:14 AM AEST
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Excellent write...very deep emotions
Well done :o)
Roses
Larry |
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