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The Children
Contributed by
desireemiote
on
Tuesday, 2nd March 2004 @ 09:57:31 AM in AEST
Topic:
oops
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Alone
Not good
Need help
Not have
Must do
On my own
In fear
With anxiety
Yet determined
Must pull through
Stronger for it
Still wish for support
Maybe later
But now
Hanging by a thread
This child
Carrying a child
Must save
And support both
The supporting fist
Shaking under the weight
No matter
How unstable
No fall
Of death
Shall come to harm
These children
Something watches over
In slumber
As well as
Wake
Presence felt
By both
Compassion
Not wholly left from them
Just felt as such
In dissappointed
Stares
Holding head high
This child with child
Shall walk
Run
Function
As those
Others
In life
Society
Shall not triumph
So easy
As it may win
Pushing down
Suffocating
Yet triumph
On the end
Is for both children
And greater are they
For it
Copyright ©
desireemiote
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2004-03-02 09:57:31]
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Re: The Children
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by desire on
Tuesday, 2nd March 2004 @ 10:46:21 AM AEST
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| i like what you have said here, let me say this about this paraticular peom i read it from the top to the bottom and then from the bottom to the top and it still made perfect sense...did you know that...you have a strong message here...slr |
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Re: The Children
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by markie on
Tuesday, 2nd March 2004 @ 10:55:08 AM AEST
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| I love this style...and the strength in the words. |
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Re: The Children
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by LOWMAN613 on
Tuesday, 2nd March 2004 @ 11:02:31 AM AEST
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| Great message for all to here! Great work! Christina |
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Re: The Children
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by EUGENE on
Monday, 8th March 2004 @ 01:28:33 PM AEST
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This is a pyramid of thought put in both a physical and figurative form. I love the message and love the facade of the poem.
Now, how do I get your recipe for this simple poem with a very complex thought? You are very good at this I guess, then teach me this! |
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