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Behind These Eyes
Contributed by
Vitreous_Soul
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Saturday, 28th February 2004 @ 05:23:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
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As gateways bright, so crystalline
Reveal the radiance within
I fall into luminous eyes
Behold purity's Gemini
Transfix my heart, deep your gaze went
You see me true, as transparent
Through windows clear, a sincere stare
Felicity to drown despair
Infused with strength, resolve and thole
Past lucid glims you view my soul
Through turbid thoughts, read and discern
While seconds pass the pages turn
Look past the shield, within the wraith
In emptiness enshrine your faith
Beyond the bale long exiled
Tattered remnants, a crying child
Sealed inside a transpicious sphere
'Neath sullen thoughts, mem'ries austere
Diffracting eyes hide sundered glass
Mesmeric stare to reave the past
You saw beyond the leaden veil
Beneath a heart that time assailed
Glass fragments barbed in solitude
Shred the love i'd longed to exude
Yet past the walls i'd cast in stone
You eased my mind, my soul's agon
In broken shards you found no flaw
Love restored a fractured jigsaw
Moment's time, eternity's tear
You bring the sun through windows clear
An angels gaze to mesmerise
You are the light behind these eyes
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Vitreous_Soul
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2004-02-28 05:23:00]
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Re: Behind These Eyes
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by venkat on
Saturday, 28th February 2004 @ 05:47:20 AM AEST
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"Moment's time, eternity's tear You bring the sun through windows clear An angels gaze to mesmerise You are the light behind these eyes.." wrapped wonderfully..
totally poem welldone..V
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Re: Behind These Eyes
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by EternitysLyre on
Saturday, 28th February 2004 @ 06:22:25 AM AEST
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As usual, the poetic majesty of unworldly ideas has blown us all away with another peice of originality. Your romantic poems are unparalled by any poet I've seen, and this is one of your many masterpeices. You said you were jealous of my way with words; well, I'm far more envious of your idyllic ideas.
Breathtakingly done.
"What takes a well man an age to see, the blind man perceives readily."
~The Palatine Poet |
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Re: Behind These Eyes
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by forever_lonely on
Saturday, 28th February 2004 @ 06:29:18 AM AEST
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*mouth drops, eyes widen tongue unravels out...* My god dan this was astounding your command of the wording in this write is amazing, you have brought me to shame, i stand humbly at your pen in awe of perfection
The imagery is a spectacle of illuminous perfection seen through the eyes of an angel, the structure could hold up the world, the rhyme scheme could chant of tribes, and the flow.. runs like water througha moutain stream.
Wonderful truely wonderful piece
Luke |
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Re: Behind These Eyes
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 28th February 2004 @ 07:32:28 AM AEST
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Magnificent.
And you know it. |
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Re: Behind These Eyes
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by Eve on
Saturday, 28th February 2004 @ 06:28:54 PM AEST
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I quit. My green pen passes on to you, for my fingers are too numb to write again.
This was an amazing use of words, VS. I don't know how you do it; teach me!
I am unwoooorthy...
Keep writing,
-Eve. |
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Re: Behind These Eyes
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by Rakerman1999 on
Saturday, 28th February 2004 @ 08:50:21 PM AEST
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Simply perfect poetry my friend....between you and luke I am starting to feel sick about my writing....lol.
Very well done
Larry
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Re: Behind These Eyes
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by DreamWeaver on
Saturday, 6th March 2004 @ 07:17:32 PM AEST
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| Such a beautifully written poem ... your words leave me breathless ... Jan |
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Re: Behind These Eyes
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by blueheart on
Thursday, 11th March 2004 @ 08:36:19 AM AEST
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| Amazingly beautiful. |
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Re: Behind These Eyes
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by STRaNGe_LiNDSeY on
Saturday, 27th March 2004 @ 02:51:57 PM AEST
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| *sigh* again that is all i can say *sigh* |
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Re: Behind These Eyes
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by shanarah on
Sunday, 16th May 2004 @ 06:58:14 AM AEST
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marvellous, your words bring breaths of living joy..
Luvs. |
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Re: Behind These Eyes
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by JarrodLuke on
Wednesday, 10th May 2006 @ 10:51:11 AM AEST
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| I like the somewhat complex imagery good work. |
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