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Porcelain Angel
Contributed by
ShadowDaughter
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Friday, 27th February 2004 @ 03:45:40 AM in AEST
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porcelain angel
plunged and tumbled far enough
to be, by all rights, fallen
but you were always too much
a creature of heaven
to succumb to the reality of hell.
falls can hurt an angel, though
and though the demons are still
beneath your oh-so-carefully-machine-carved feet,
you've fallen a little too far
for the sky to be as in reach
as it was once upon a time.
neither seraph nor demon,
human, now, perhaps?
quite as tragic as the other . . .
and when you shattered at the bottom
of your seemingly endless descension
I watched helplessly
--so helplessly!--
as you exploded into a thousand pieces
I tried to pick them up, I did
but razor-blade shards are hard to carry
with bloodied, tattered fingers
I brought them back
(I think I got most of them)
to your head
--round and grotesque as it stood on its own--
in a sorry, broken heap.
you smiled in gratitude
that deftly painted, round, red smile
but a jagged crack had appeared,
slicing your smile in two,
from your graceless flight
and it was a shattered smile,
and I grew angry at the world
for inflicting upon you such a fall
we glued the pieces clumsily back together
with a handful of tears
donated from ignorant admirers
of your broken angel wings
as you were saving your own
for the myriad of things
that were, to your mind,
better worth your tears.
perhaps it was mere coincidence
that, when we put the last shard I could find
into its place (your eye)
and tried to cover the gaps
your porcelain seemed to re-form
and your smile smoothed the crack
and your eyes became vacant
as you became yet another porcelain human
factory made
"come on," you murmured,
"can we, like, go home now?
Gilmore Girls is on in a bit
and I don't want to miss this episode."
Copyright ©
ShadowDaughter
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Re: Porcelain Angel
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by SensitiveSoAbused on
Friday, 27th February 2004 @ 04:16:57 AM AEST
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through fogged eyes of exhaustion
my comprehension of this poem
was less then desired.
However, I got the message, although i was not able to read all of the lines as closely as i would have liked.
It is a sad story... like, omigod....
i enjoyed the last stanza...
cheers,
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Re: Porcelain Angel
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by emystar on
Friday, 27th February 2004 @ 05:08:06 AM AEST
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Sad but writen beautifully.
luv, huggs,
emy |
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Re: Porcelain Angel
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by lil_angel on
Friday, 27th February 2004 @ 05:41:00 AM AEST
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| This is a wonderful write! Very good job, very emotional, but very good! |
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Re: Porcelain Angel
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Friday, 27th February 2004 @ 07:00:19 AM AEST
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Wow...
"I tried to pick them up, I did
but razor-blade shards are hard to carry"
That line---the whole damn poem for that matter--is phenomenal. You captured the sadness so well, in a whirlwind of reality intertwined with metaphor. I fall at your feet with my inferior talent.
Truly, with heartfelt CEGH's,
-Dan
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Re: Porcelain Angel
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 27th February 2004 @ 07:50:01 AM AEST
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"as you exploded into a thousand pieces
I tried to pick them up, I did
but razor-blade shards are hard to carry...
................but a jagged crack had appeared,
slicing your smile in two,
from your graceless flight
and it was a shattered smile,
and I grew angry at the world
for inflicting upon you such a fall"...
After reading these lines I am shedding tears...yes..my daughter..its true.. venkat
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Re: Porcelain Angel
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by deadly_blaZe on
Sunday, 29th February 2004 @ 12:03:37 AM AEST
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unique and brilliant
XxEricaxX |
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Re: Porcelain Angel
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by deadly_blaZe on
Sunday, 29th February 2004 @ 12:03:39 AM AEST
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unique and brilliant
XxEricaxX |
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Re: Porcelain Angel
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by Stitch on
Thursday, 4th March 2004 @ 11:39:07 PM AEST
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Nice write, but I liked this line
"beneath your oh-so-carefully-machine-carved feet," the best.
Stitch
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Re: Porcelain Angel
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Friday, 12th March 2004 @ 06:49:23 PM AEST
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Wonderfullly done!!
Jenni |
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Re: Porcelain Angel
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by Necromant on
Monday, 29th March 2004 @ 03:12:54 PM AEST
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What a thoughful poem!!!! Really expressive! Touching and sad as well! I really love your style!
Anne :D |
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Re: Porcelain Angel
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by STRaNGe_LiNDSeY on
Saturday, 3rd April 2004 @ 07:48:29 PM AEST
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Wow, i can honestly say that was the VERY first poem (other then my own) that has ever brought me to tears. I know to many times when this has happened and to many times i sat by like an "ignorant admirer"....thank you so much for this write. wow, nora... you are truely blessed with the ability to move someone with your writing. I bow to you. You far exceed the likes of me.
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Re: Porcelain Angel
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by Cynthia on
Thursday, 13th May 2004 @ 08:28:58 PM AEST
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| Every word of this write was truly amazing. I hope your friend is better now. I also hope she had the chance to read this poem. *S* Cynthia |
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Re: Porcelain Angel
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by HellsLibrarian on
Saturday, 19th June 2004 @ 12:50:24 AM AEST
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| wow. I watch that show. freaky. I really liked your poem, although I'm still working on liking myself after reading it. |
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