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Twenty-Four Candles
Contributed by
pumpkinpie
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Wednesday, 25th February 2004 @ 09:35:32 PM in AEST
Topic:
BirthdayPoems
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It's your birthday today, will you celebrate by the sea
The Bahamas,Brazil or better yet the island of Capri
I'm guessing you'll swim in those flamboyant waters
And swim amongst the starfish,vibrant corals and scarlet lobsters
Or you might stay with your friends and drink an almond margarita
In a frozen cocktail glass complete with a straw
Dance to the music under the sparkling disco ball
And giggle with your girlfriends in the bathroom stall
But I'm guessing it's with your family you'll want to be
With angelfood cake and special lemon tea
Recollecting cherished memories spent with you
And heartfelt conversations about how much they love you too
Just thought I'd send you birthday wishes
Filled with hugs and special kisses
And tell you how much you're present in my heart
At your tombstone is where I start
Copyright ©
pumpkinpie
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2004-02-25 21:35:32]
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Re: Twenty-Four Candles
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by Stalkee on
Wednesday, 25th February 2004 @ 10:36:04 PM AEST
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| hm, good poem, i liked this read =) |
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Re: Twenty-Four Candles
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Wednesday, 25th February 2004 @ 11:06:31 PM AEST
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WOW..Great write..lovely imagery!!
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Re: Twenty-Four Candles
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by Rakerman1999 on
Thursday, 26th February 2004 @ 09:43:27 AM AEST
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ohhhh....the ending got me. So very sad my friend and so very well written.
Beautifully sad and very well done.
Roses
Larry |
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Re: Twenty-Four Candles
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 28th February 2004 @ 11:40:34 PM AEST
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| awww, february is a hard month here too, this poem is a beautiful tribute, i still wish my hubby happy birthday, and its been 12 years now.... hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Twenty-Four Candles
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by emystar on
Friday, 5th March 2004 @ 09:49:55 PM AEST
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Well done1
That ending grabbed me too.
luv, huggs,
emy
Thank u so much for your comments on my work. |
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Re: Twenty-Four Candles
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by emystar on
Friday, 5th March 2004 @ 09:50:20 PM AEST
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Well done
That ending grabbed me too.
luv, huggs,
emy
Thank u so much for your comments on my work. |
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Re: Twenty-Four Candles
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by Valerie_Pearson on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 03:55:15 PM AEST
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| Very grabbing words the ending in very sad though, take care Val |
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Re: Twenty-Four Candles
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by Overstated on
Sunday, 15th August 2004 @ 02:31:07 PM AEST
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| This is so well written you talk about everyday items and make them seem extra ordinary - that is hard to do!' one word sprung to mind whilst reading this which sums up this poem - 'delightful' |
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Re: Twenty-Four Candles
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by Spazzo on
Saturday, 8th January 2005 @ 02:46:33 PM AEST
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This is sad, I am sorry. It's a great poem too.
Spazzo |
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Re: Twenty-Four Candles
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 18th September 2005 @ 12:22:12 AM AEST
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Brilliant. Again you are so creative and the imagery. And the ending caught me so of guard....I was so into reading this and it caught me....from so happy to tragic sadness.
Really, this was brilliant imho.
Hmmm...wasn't going to say this but oh what the....it is my b-day today.
You really did great with this write. |
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