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First Time
Contributed by
ksprincess42004
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Wednesday, 25th February 2004 @ 03:45:06 PM in AEST
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The carefree mood fades
Coulds darken your eyes
Something dangerous lurks in your smile
My heart stops
My mind races
I shake my head, no
No I do not want this
But you come anyway
I push you from me
And you pound my face into the wall
And blood smears my vision
You leap, and I cannot move
I scream
A wail that sounds unhuman
A cry that pierces my soul
As you pierce my purity
Pain sears through my body
Like hot pokers stabbing at my innocence
Agony fills me--Tears are streaming
You smile at my pain
Glad to know you are enjoying it
A hundred years pass and its over
In just a moment or two
But the pain continues
It hurts to breathe--
To feel--to think--
So I just lay there
The light within me snuffed
And slowly I slip
Into unconsciousness
And I fade into a world
Where I am still white with naivety
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ksprincess42004
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2004-02-25 15:45:06]
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Re: First Time
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by kailadragon on
Wednesday, 25th February 2004 @ 03:47:10 PM AEST
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| i liked the poem.........i honestly hope that wasn't your "first time" and if it was.......i truly am sorry for you |
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Re: First Time
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 25th February 2004 @ 03:52:48 PM AEST
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That's the first time i've ever been appalled by poetry - not for any lack of emotion or honesty (of which it is overflowing) - but for the incredibly vivid way you described, what I've perceived to be your rape.
I sincerely hope you recovered from this . . .
and if you haven't yet - I sincerely hope you will. |
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Re: First Time
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by Aika on
Wednesday, 25th February 2004 @ 03:55:21 PM AEST
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| ouch ouch ouch.. that is cruel.. i just hope you also experience better than this.. love, aika:-) |
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Re: First Time
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by lil_angel on
Wednesday, 25th February 2004 @ 03:55:43 PM AEST
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| This broke my heart...i hope you are ok....this poem is close to my heart so im me if u need to talk. Been there kinda situation....but this is really well written! Very vivid....i could picture it. But wonderful write, on such a sad topic! |
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Re: First Time
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 25th February 2004 @ 04:30:13 PM AEST
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| what can i say? very disturbing, i just hope things have got better for you, i red this and just sat here stunned good luck for the future. |
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Re: First Time
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by apollo on
Wednesday, 25th February 2004 @ 05:27:31 PM AEST
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| the images in this poetry are some of the best i have ever witnessed. they are not only frightening but also very clear. i hope to god that this is only a poem and not a real life occurence, and if so. i am so sorry for you. take care of yourself and hopefully you will recover. |
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Re: First Time
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by alecfernadez on
Wednesday, 25th February 2004 @ 05:36:48 PM AEST
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cant describe in words how good this poem is!
I can relate to it,
Anyways, this poem is just brilliant, and keep up the great work, and channelling |
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Re: First Time
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by PumpkinPie on
Thursday, 26th February 2004 @ 12:05:47 AM AEST
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I agree,as heartwrenching it was to read this,it was written beautifully.I especially liked the last verse...Such pain you are feeling..May God bless you,
PumpkinPie |
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