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Pressure
Contributed by
jaeann
on
Tuesday, 24th February 2004 @ 04:31:37 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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emanating through the trees
the breeze chokes her breath
lost amid the empty forest
standing patiently for her death
the walls are closing in on her
and she fears the path is lost
after all that's buried so early
what's audacity to the cost
the sun has broken her promise
the crescent moon is here to stay
firelight within the circle
her senses fully betrayed
searching in vain for her rescuer
but none are ever close by
she's pushed them all away
and sits in her recluse and cries
destined forlorn and shaken
no pennies left to think
she's dawn upon the delta
and has slipped beneath the brink
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jaeann
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2004-02-24 16:31:37]
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Re: Pressure
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by afraid_of_fear on
Tuesday, 24th February 2004 @ 04:35:20 PM AEST
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this is good.. though so sad..
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Re: Pressure
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 24th February 2004 @ 04:38:35 PM AEST
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| oh jaeann! your poem is breathtaking! wow, ive got chills lol, hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Pressure
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by Ilhar on
Tuesday, 24th February 2004 @ 04:42:13 PM AEST
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what can I say I have always enjoyed your poetry this is no exception
Shari |
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Re: Pressure
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by Rakerman1999 on
Tuesday, 24th February 2004 @ 04:42:38 PM AEST
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ohhhhh...that was GREAT!!! Excellent...excellent write! poetic perfection.
Roses for this one
Larry |
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Re: Pressure
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by lil_angel on
Tuesday, 24th February 2004 @ 04:59:43 PM AEST
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| Wow very good! |
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Re: Pressure
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by lovingcritters on
Tuesday, 24th February 2004 @ 05:11:53 PM AEST
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Oh dear little Pear Lady, it's wonderful to read the marvelous write from your pen again! And so like all the others too! Honest and to the point.......reasoning on pressure, and includes you and me!
Very good poetry.
I love you,
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Re: Pressure
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 24th February 2004 @ 05:51:32 PM AEST
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The aching heart here fills me with a feeling of lonliness and despair. Extremely sad but beautifully written.
Hugs,
Rita |
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