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in his boat of broken hope
Contributed by
Cancer
on
Tuesday, 24th February 2004 @ 12:41:48 AM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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a walking graveyard
for he held inside
a patchwork tomb
for every little piece of him that died
sailing in a boat
of broken hope
slowly sinking as he went
alone in a sea
of bitter tears
that fell for emotions
that he no longer felt
a sky of dreams
above his head
so far out of his reach
he no longer tried
just looked up and sighed
and pretended
that he was someone else
anyone else
so long he'd sailed
in his leaky boat
yet he'd never be allowed to sink
just float forever
in the tiny world
that he was forced to make
and the pretty stars in the sky
that everyone loves
only make him feel lonely
the winds of hate
the waves of rage
toss his boat
and bring the daze
the world of red
he knows so well
silent screams smear his vision
and everything looks like Hell
he'll never smell the scent of freedom
never feel the caress of love
only float alone
in that broken boat
taunted by the empty dreams above
and he'll never set foot on land again
though he's searched for so many years
just wait for his hope
to finally disappear
then drown in his bitter tears
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Cancer
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2004-02-24 00:41:48]
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Re: in his boat of broken hope
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by arden on
Tuesday, 24th February 2004 @ 12:44:48 AM AEST
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thats really sad. but very well writen. it is a awesome write!
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Re: in his boat of broken hope
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by lil_angel on
Tuesday, 24th February 2004 @ 01:11:56 AM AEST
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| This is really good. I like reading ur work when i finally catch it! Good job and keep writing! |
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Re: in his boat of broken hope
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by kidpoet_213 on
Tuesday, 24th February 2004 @ 01:15:50 AM AEST
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I love it!! It's sad... Sometimes it's how I feel about myself... Sad... floating alone with only a boat of broken hope!!
Keep up the good work... it's beautifully written.
~Donna~ |
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Re: in his boat of broken hope
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Tuesday, 24th February 2004 @ 07:10:38 AM AEST
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The meaning of this poem is even deeper than the water described within it. Definitely one of your best, and the most original i've seen all day. Very good work.
Truly,
-V.S. |
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Re: in his boat of broken hope
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by bobotheclown on
Thursday, 26th February 2004 @ 08:27:08 PM AEST
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wow I don't know how I missed this. I agree with V.S. that this is one of yer best. I loved this I felt the pain that u portrayed so clearly it almost hurt me. I loved it all the imagery was amazing.
Bobo (Joel) |
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