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Final Goodbye
Contributed by
ThePunkPoet
on
Sunday, 22nd February 2004 @ 05:58:07 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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The darkness rains heavily, a downpour upon the human soul. Swaggering about wearily as the day drags on into the night. The moon emitting its pale white glow unto the people. The soft sounds of the city, crickets in the countryside. All the poor lonesome creatures of the night and the melancholy music that strikes that one nerve…you break down in tears. How gently they dance down your cheek, glistening in the moon’s glow. Your tears for me I feel soaking into my viens as I lie beneath the earth but I beg of you, cry not for me. Shed no tear in my name, speak no remorse. Allow me to pass on without the memory of my pain and then maybe one day we’ll meet again.
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Re: Final Goodbye
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 22nd February 2004 @ 06:39:58 PM AEST
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I like this line of yours it is original..
Your tears for me I feel soaking into my viens
Very good, try writing one poem in Iambic tetrameter, or Iambic pentameter. Or one like mine called [Missing in action] the sonnet form. Just a suggestion.bye Wes... |
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Re: Final Goodbye
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by Lolita on
Monday, 23rd February 2004 @ 10:22:58 AM AEST
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| I love your choice of words. Some of those images really stand out. I love it :-) |
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