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Game
Contributed by
remy
on
Thursday, 19th February 2004 @ 04:03:14 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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loud and dumb
subtle mess
coarse anomaly...
at the best
gone so far
sharper sights
i've a song to sing...
oh i might
but you don't want to hear about it
you'll see a sideshow that's pure
still separate the glee around this
come back for the breakdown moor
i've got a soul encased
but the shards are strung abrasive mess
and with feeling gone
perhaps the stale gets stronger duress
absolutely
oh yes
broken in
lining grey
skewered symmetry...
like today
far too gone
simple game
no more offerings...
it's too lame
but you don't need to think about it
you'll feel this sideshow once more
can't take away the glee around this
so come back into the breakdown moor
i've got a soul replaced
by the shards strung in abrasive mess
and with each feeling gone
perhaps the stale gets stronger duress
absolutely
oh yes
and so the story goes...
like a senile juxtapose...
placed about a garden rose...
simple game is how it goes...
Copyright ©
remy
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2004-02-19 16:03:14]
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Re: Game
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by Kie on
Thursday, 19th February 2004 @ 05:13:23 PM AEST
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| the 4th and last stanzas pure gold. Loved this poem! Kie |
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Re: Game
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by Asatru on
Thursday, 19th February 2004 @ 05:29:47 PM AEST
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| I've gotta agree with Kie, but I liked the whole thing. |
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Re: Game
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by Wesley_Dale_Willis on
Thursday, 19th February 2004 @ 05:41:05 PM AEST
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| Yes very nice I hope you kep it up. Take care Wes... |
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Re: Game
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by Daniela_Maria_Violin on
Thursday, 19th February 2004 @ 05:59:28 PM AEST
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love this!
you just keep getting better and better (as if there was any room to...*smiles*) awesome write!
Dani |
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Re: Game
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by Stitch on
Thursday, 19th February 2004 @ 07:11:46 PM AEST
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I think these would make great song lyrics.
Stitch |
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Re: Game
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by PRECIOUSBECKY on
Wednesday, 10th March 2004 @ 11:02:15 AM AEST
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| I REALLY LIKE IT- STRANGE WHAT INSPIRES US |
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