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My Angel
Contributed by
Vitreous_Soul
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Thursday, 19th February 2004 @ 06:51:52 AM in AEST
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In drawing shade the twilight fades
Wind howls through verdant trees
Moonlit bath 'cross dew-scented path
A voice beckons softly
O'er fallen leaves trampled with ease
With ev'ry stride I take
I shamble forth, my plot due north
Toward a tranquil lake
Along this pond, ensconced despond
A veil of sadness looms
Half-hearted thrown, I skip a stone
Azure waters consume
The stone doth land, ripples expand
A splash breaks quiescence
Through water born and sky that's torn
Embodied radiance
I'm given time to weave my rhyme
An orison to sing
I cry my prayer through luminaire
"Descend on pearl white wings"
The last word said, I gaze ahead
Effulgent aura grows
These eyes have met a silhouette
Resplendent beauty flows
On air I stand, extend my hand
Our fingertips connect
She who's enskied, for which I cried
Now brought to life perfect
When our eyes meet I feel complete
A reverie serene
Share kismet's dance, Heaven's romance
Our empyrean scene
At last we kiss, enduring bliss
Beyond mere time and space
'Cross silken lips a zephyr whips
Ethereal embrace
Thus joined as one, 'neath rising sun
An iridescent flair
On brightest morn, my angel's born
The answer to my prayer
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Re: My Angel
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by limpingunicorn on
Thursday, 19th February 2004 @ 07:06:47 AM AEST
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Tender, ethereal and touching. I'm sure Sarah Elizabeth will appreciate this - what woman wouldn't?
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Re: My Angel
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by DreamWeaver on
Thursday, 19th February 2004 @ 07:18:44 AM AEST
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| Totally beautiful ... Sarah should be in seventh heaven by now after reading this ... a delightful gift of love ... Jan |
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Re: My Angel
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by blueheart on
Thursday, 19th February 2004 @ 08:57:11 AM AEST
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| Wow, she would be really touched by this poem. Really one of your best. The majestic imagery is fantastic. |
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Re: My Angel
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by Kie on
Thursday, 19th February 2004 @ 10:35:32 AM AEST
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Beyond beautiful. I believe this is your best! Heavenly, serene, vivid imagery a five star gem!
Congrats to you and Sarah, awww the magic of love! Kie |
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Re: My Angel
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by forever_lonely on
Thursday, 19th February 2004 @ 11:49:23 AM AEST
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*jaw tumbles endlessly towards the floor as he gawps at this masterpiece*
Dan .. i have a question.. i very very serious one... can i go out with you :D
This is unimaginably amazing i could see myself and my otherhalf in that moment i truely could
This has to go right up at the top of my endless list of my favorites by you, i think im going to need a new piece of paper because tis list is never ending
The structure and rhyme is flawless, the word useage makes me want to sing
Without any shadow of a doubt in my mind Sarah Elizabeth will be lost in a deep sea of blissful romance and passion after reading this
Truely remarkable
Luke |
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Re: My Angel
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 19th February 2004 @ 12:24:50 PM AEST
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AWESOME!!!!!!! ::::snapsnapsnap:::::
This a portrayal of love in divine splendor!
You captured it gorgeously!!!!!! Thanks for sharing this with us! I hope Sarah Elizabeth read it first! :-)
Angel always...godspeed...joni |
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Re: My Angel
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by starlight_dancer on
Thursday, 19th February 2004 @ 04:12:50 PM AEST
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Dan that is so beautiful. I did read this first as you know :) Am still over whelmed by it and I can't get over how truly beautiful it is. No one has ever written me a poem before, and to have this one written for me, means so much. I can't believe it's real :) It's like a dream.
I love you Dan. So much :) This poem means the world to me, and to have it written by the one person I truly love means so much more than anyone could ever imagine.
The rhyming is awesome too. I've never read a poem which expresses so much meaning and love in it, using such awesome words.
Dan, I love you more than anything, all the world
Thank you.
Stay Beautiful, Stay True, Stay You
Sarah
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Re: My Angel
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 20th February 2004 @ 09:11:40 AM AEST
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*grins*
Easily the best thing i've read in here so far. That last stanza was pure gold, man. Pure gold. |
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Re: My Angel
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by Eve on
Friday, 20th February 2004 @ 08:48:12 PM AEST
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(Since I really can't come up with words right now...)
*Claps!*
Keep writing,
-Eve.
PS- This is the most gorgeous romantic type poetry I've ever read in my entire lifetime. In fact, it's so ridiculously good that I can't help but wonder if you're some famous writer under the guise of someone normal. If this is too much praise... refer to the above clapping. >>; |
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Re: My Angel
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by arden on
Monday, 1st March 2004 @ 11:38:07 PM AEST
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beautiful! wow so good. wonderfuly done i love this.
Arden |
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Re: My Angel
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by Stitch on
Sunday, 7th March 2004 @ 06:33:20 PM AEST
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When our eyes meet, I feel complete
I would add the comma there. Otherwise, this is perfect. One of the most beautiful I've read on this site. I'm glad I stopped over to check it out.
Stitch |
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Re: My Angel
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by lovingcritters on
Monday, 15th March 2004 @ 08:05:57 AM AEST
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Breathtakingly beautiful.......Dan......don't do that to me......I held my breath throughout...nearly died......over the splendid write.
Oh, how I thanks the Gods that be
Love has transformed a heart in thee.
Loving feeling, concern for another.
May the God's bless you both for ever!
You're right
it was one of your best......but then they
are the best........this was just the best of the best!
Love you
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Re: My Angel
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by STRaNGe_LiNDSeY on
Saturday, 27th March 2004 @ 02:55:50 PM AEST
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| Ok I have a question... LOL What does a girl have to do to find someone as wonderful as you. Sarah is the LUCKIEST person I have never met. :) Sarah, you got yourself a keeper. Thank you for letting us in on the romance a little. ;) Sweet... so sweet. |
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Re: My Angel
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by Chrissylee on
Sunday, 28th March 2004 @ 11:33:01 AM AEST
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| ohh my this is so beautifully written and composed and ohh so breath taking too... i think a new modern shakespearean has just been born. i curtsy to thee... fantastic write!!!!! |
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Re: My Angel
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by Jenni_Kalicharan on
Monday, 12th April 2004 @ 08:04:52 AM AEST
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Sigh..... what a poem!!! I guess when you have the right inspiration, this is the result....
Best of everything to you two...
Jenni |
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Re: My Angel
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by SlimStaple on
Sunday, 5th September 2004 @ 07:32:10 PM AEST
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Truely a wonderful poem. I love your work. You used beautiful words and discribe things with in a very eloquent way.
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