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Weak as a Child
Contributed by
bobotheclown
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Thursday, 19th February 2004 @ 12:35:47 AM in AEST
Topic:
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I've stained, tainted these walls
And 'they' resonant mocking me
With 'their' demented glee
'They' are intimate with my pain
And 'they' laugh like some sadistic god
I have shown 'them' my scars
'They' have seen me cry
'They' have heard my silent prayers
'They' have tasted my agony
And now 'they' replay these scenes
Shattering any trust I had
I put my hands in front of my face
Trying to block out these images,
But I still hear 'them' taunting
And I scream and foam
And throw things and tear
At my weakened nerves
Until I am put in a restricting white coat
Unable to fight, debiliatated with drugs
They lock me in a room
With padded white walls
Like a chameleon I try to camouflage myself,
But 'they' find me, find my weakness
And torment me... feeding off my pain
Until I writhe on the floor
Weakened and stripped of everything
Nothing more than a child
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bobotheclown
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2004-02-19 00:35:47]
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Re: Weak as a Child
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by lil_angel on
Thursday, 19th February 2004 @ 12:41:28 AM AEST
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| This is a good poem....you have a great talent! |
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Re: Weak as a Child
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by PumpkinPie on
Thursday, 19th February 2004 @ 01:31:30 AM AEST
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Considering that I think the "they" is your mind,the voices inside of you,I can only hope for you to shut them out forever since they seem to be causing you so much pain...I'm sorry you had or still have (for that matter) to go through this,I know it's hard shutting out things that you have no control over.However, your poem kept me reading and feeling some of your pain all the way.You really have a nice way expressing your emotions and I hope everything goes better for you.Kudos to you on a very well written poem filled with emotion !
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Re: Weak as a Child
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by afraid_of_fear on
Friday, 20th February 2004 @ 03:29:45 PM AEST
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this is good.. although i think i prefer the next one you posted, "Bleeding Cries"..
I love "Unable to fight, debiliatated with drugs" that lines lush..
hope you're okay...
char x_x_x |
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Re: Weak as a Child
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by carebear on
Friday, 20th February 2004 @ 06:50:13 PM AEST
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boy I think u just wrote wut my frind is feeling very very good sexy boy hehehe..-huggles- I luv yer poetry it makes me feel good wen I'm down..
luv yer girl
Care |
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Re: Weak as a Child
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by Chanti on
Sunday, 22nd February 2004 @ 02:01:45 AM AEST
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| Aaawsome. I love this! Its *****in beautiful great job |
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Re: Weak as a Child
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by Cynthia on
Thursday, 26th February 2004 @ 08:55:14 PM AEST
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| Bobo this is a very good write. *S* Cynthia |
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Re: Weak as a Child
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 4th March 2004 @ 07:15:22 AM AEST
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| Ooo Joel, this is awesome. It portrayed some amazing imagery and kept me on the edge of my seat. In fact I read it a second time, out loud, and couldn't help saying the word 'they' as if it were vermin. Amazing, once again I am in love with your writings. |
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Re: Weak as a Child
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by Soulless on
Sunday, 4th April 2004 @ 10:58:57 PM AEST
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Hey this reminds me a bit of what I was thinking what i wrote "Reverie" Only yours is a big darker and deeper than mine went. wonderful job. I enjoy the disturbance reflecting from this poem. I think you and I have similar strings of thought. Wonderful word choice as well.
Kisses,
~Soulless~ |
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