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Warrior's Song
Contributed by
fionndruinne
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Wednesday, 18th February 2004 @ 08:13:58 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I stand on a hill
A wild wind is blowing
Grey clouds are in the sky
Across the land
Hills rise
Grey with hard stone.
Cold mist falls
Biting through my cloak
As I draw it tight
My soul is sad
A burden lies on my heart
For death is drawing near.
Below me are sparks
Of dim light on spear-heads
In the dark shadow of men
A host of foes
Fell ones coming upon us
In a lonely land.
My comrades are about me
Standing silent
Their faces are pale and stern
Mail-coats glimmering
Our standard is snapping
In a bitter breeze.
Our swords are drawn
Tines of cold keen steel
Flicker in our hands
As the enemy nears
We set our broad shields
And our hearts.
My hand is ready
I whisper the name
Of the girl dearest to me
While war-cries go up
From the dark-haired foe
The shock of battle is met.
Spears streak the air
Bitter points finding their marks
My sword clashes
With the wild foes’
Ringing in my hand
It calls a cold challenge.
One before me goes down
My blade in his heart
A reddened point
The rain swiftly cleans
As I wield it above my head
Foes are all about me.
Battle fury falls upon me
Summoned from War’s hall
My blade is a bolt
Of white lightning
Hammering the foe
Battle joy is on me.
All about men fight
Fighting and dying
Clashing, crying
As cold rain falls
Cold swords bite
Coldness falls over the dead.
The fight falters
Those before me are fallen
I see our bright swords
Are claiming the hill
Our foes lie about us
Sodden with rain and blood.
I see my comrades standing
Beloved friends are they
The rain washes their bloodied mail
As we embrace each other
The battle is won!
We cry with joyous tears.
I sit before a warming fire
That redly lights the hall
My beloved is beside me
Her who I saved from a fell foe
In a hall that still stands
Beloved is this peace to me.
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fionndruinne
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Re: Warrior's Song
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by lil_angel on
Wednesday, 18th February 2004 @ 09:01:22 PM AEST
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| This is a really good poem. U have a great peice of work here! |
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Re: Warrior's Song
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by PoeticRequiem on
Thursday, 19th February 2004 @ 01:44:29 PM AEST
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I too found a great deal of enjoyment from this piece-
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Re: Warrior's Song
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by Baronhawk on
Thursday, 19th February 2004 @ 01:49:15 PM AEST
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| Truly... a whirlwind to stir the blood. This would truly make a great song for warriors to sing aroud the campfire. |
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Re: Warrior's Song
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by faith_my_eyes on
Friday, 20th February 2004 @ 06:09:53 PM AEST
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This is very different from your usual style. I ejoyed your venture into a more staccato wordsmithing style. This poem is wonderful Andrew. I really felt as if I was at battle, protecting the woman I love (in my case, that might be a guy, or rather I am the one who is being fought to protect!) Great job!
Em |
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Re: Warrior's Song
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by Wachumiri on
Tuesday, 24th February 2004 @ 05:37:18 PM AEST
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Yah, really good. I just think you should have put a frightful grin somewhere in there...
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Re: Warrior's Song
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by ladyfawn on
Sunday, 7th March 2004 @ 12:05:50 AM AEST
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| breathtaking, creative, clever, filled with vivid images, love it, thank you for sharing, hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Warrior's Song
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by STRaNGe_LiNDSeY on
Saturday, 10th April 2004 @ 05:08:11 PM AEST
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The descriptions you give in this poem are amazing. Like I could close my eyes and BE THERE in your poem. You have quite the talent Fionn... you are very unique.
LIndsey |
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Re: Warrior's Song
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by jaeann on
Friday, 23rd April 2004 @ 03:23:18 AM AEST
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| wow.......what a tale..........so vivid.....so emotional.......beloved is this peace to me......beautiful...... |
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Re: Warrior's Song
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by liquidsunshine on
Sunday, 30th May 2004 @ 02:53:31 PM AEST
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More choppy than your other poems, but this style is one that suits war and warriors and such. Great one!!
Bravo and encore!!!
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Re: Warrior's Song
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by emystar on
Sunday, 27th June 2004 @ 06:01:01 AM AEST
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Very good writing.
No one really likes war except the ones that are saved from the foe or at least that's my thinking.
Good work.
luv, huggs,
emy
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Re: Warrior's Song
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by Tanmaya on
Friday, 30th July 2004 @ 04:37:42 AM AEST
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I completely understand the soul of this poem!
I dont' want to use the same old adjectives to describe it -beautiful, awesome etc. etc.
It's just very real.
You have great talent! Keep writing.
I had written something like this long time back, a song for a warrior, must search among my papers.
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Re: Warrior's Song
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by emystar on
Thursday, 12th August 2004 @ 03:18:26 AM AEST
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Awesome writing.
A masterpeice.
huggs, luv,
emy |
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