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This Old House
Contributed by
Mad-Mancunian
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Monday, 16th February 2004 @ 03:59:04 AM in AEST
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This old house, he played one;
It played knick-knack at the front
And the roof always leaks ev’ry day and night:
I’m moving out, this shack’s a fright.
This old house, it played two;
It made fires on the roof
See the bad old mould come creepin’ all around;
This old house went tumbling down.
This old house, it played three;
It threw bricks down the chimney
Well, home insurance didn’t seem so bad
When our dear old home’s gone mad!
This old house, it played four;
It made hinges forget their door
With a knick-knack, paddy-whack; give a dog a bone!
This old house came rolling home
This old house, it played five;
It played knick-knack on a hive
Now the wasps are a-swarmin’ on the warpath
This old house’s gone far enough!
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Re: This Old House
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by venkat on
Monday, 16th February 2004 @ 04:59:26 AM AEST
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Really a bad experience..the pathetic condition of the old houe was drawn
up vividly..welldone..venkat |
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Re: This Old House
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Monday, 16th February 2004 @ 06:25:32 AM AEST
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This is...beyond description. Equal parts anger, humor, dementia, and plain old weirdness make this stand out. Very intriguing, glad you shared this one.
Truly,
-V.S. |
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Re: This Old House
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 16th February 2004 @ 02:41:02 PM AEST
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Wow! Seems your poem is being read hundreds of times....nice spin on an old tale!!!
Keep on writing!!!
Angel always...godspeed...joni
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Re: This Old House
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by Qohinoor on
Wednesday, 28th April 2004 @ 01:22:03 AM AEST
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A great write, bro.
It's good to see you haven't deserted us fully, to pursue your Arabic... |
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Re: This Old House
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 19th May 2004 @ 04:17:10 AM AEST
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There are some syllabic ommissions which spoil the rhythm of this parody.
"It made fires on the roof" -
I'd add 'upon' to make it fit &
"When our dear old home’s gone mad!"
Would sound better as;
"When this dear old home’s of mine's gone mad!"
Apart from these, you have written a very catchy, vivid and humorous parody which is quite memorable.
Thanks for sharing. |
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Re: This Old House
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by Stitch on
Wednesday, 6th October 2004 @ 08:12:27 AM AEST
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Interesting take on the perils of homeownership. Diesel fumes will kill hornets by the way.
Stitch
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