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cruel little girl
Contributed by
Cancer
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Sunday, 15th February 2004 @ 09:04:21 PM in AEST
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you are just a single tear
in the ocean that i weep
you are but one of the demons
that haunts me as i sleep
you're just a solitary stab wound
in my pin-cushion spine
you're just one of a million scars
that i've picked up over time
yet you hurt the worst of all
the cut that never heals
so numb so long
but you're the pain that i will always feel
surrounded by a legion of sores
you radiate with misery
in a corridor of oft-opened doors
you alone lead to my agony
the only wound left
that still holds a sting
and i don't guess it really
means anything
but it amazes me
how you drove me to this
when all that we shared
was a childish kiss
and now i stand ready
to destroy this world
over unshakable memories
of a cruel little girl
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Cancer
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Re: cruel little girl
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by ToriVeigh on
Sunday, 15th February 2004 @ 09:27:48 PM AEST
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| You've certainly made your feelings clear. Darkness, bitterness, hopelessness.....a very good write. |
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Re: cruel little girl
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by Shadow on
Sunday, 15th February 2004 @ 10:30:39 PM AEST
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| Don't fear the inner demons. They are apart of you. Remember that they are your puppets your shadows if you will. Pull the threads carfuly. For the pain they gather you feel. The poem was good. Expressed alot of thing i can relate with. Well no the little girl part. anyway. Lot's of hattred. Don't keep it bottled up. You'll explode eventualy. If you need to yell at me. Happens alot. Good write! |
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Re: cruel little girl
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by DreamWeaver on
Monday, 16th February 2004 @ 04:45:03 AM AEST
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| Awesome. I've read this umpteen times ... great rhythm, great rhyme .. and words that have a sting in their tail ... just a damn good write ... Jan |
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Re: cruel little girl
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by bobotheclown on
Monday, 16th February 2004 @ 08:28:41 PM AEST
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I don't get how it was personal, but it was damn good nonetheless. The first 4 lines especially struck me.
Bobo (Joel) |
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Re: cruel little girl
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by Crash on
Tuesday, 17th February 2004 @ 01:26:43 AM AEST
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WOW!! damn good post, i can definately relate. well worded, and it stirrs emotion strongly. great write,
~Rob~ |
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