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Suicide of a school girl!
Contributed by
deathdrop
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Friday, 13th February 2004 @ 12:50:01 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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Floating in a silent mass of water,
lost, unloved, unwanted daughter.
reaching out for some one to care,
crying out, to realize none is there!
holding her soul, she can't let go,
just someone to hold... but the answer's "no"!
half awake, but also half dead,
she can't escape the echoes in her head.
lying in the darkness, floating else where unknown,
crying in the echoes, dying and lost out on her own!
what she feels is far away,
and then her mind,
is destroyed by the day!
her tummy is sore,
her mind is raw,
and dying seems the only way,
to get away!
so she runs out of school,
and cries, and cries,
then she runs to a bridge,
jumps off and dies.
so now her life is gone,
she has finished it,
but at least now she doesn't have to put up with,
rest of the "neglecting ****"!!!!
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deathdrop
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2004-02-13 12:50:01]
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Re: Suicide of a school girl!
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by intelectualpoet on
Friday, 13th February 2004 @ 12:57:49 PM AEST
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WOW! It was another eye opener, I hope you never have to feel like there is no one for you to talk to, so if you need me, just E-mail me or if you have AIM my S/N is BMW4L1f3, I'm always on.
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Re: Suicide of a school girl!
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by Necromant on
Friday, 13th February 2004 @ 07:55:22 PM AEST
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This poem is one of your bests, it captures a lot of raw emotion, lately I'm so fed up with school that I almost wanted to be the girl you described. I loved this one, wonderful writing! Keep it up!
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Re: Suicide of a school girl!
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by bobotheclown on
Saturday, 14th February 2004 @ 01:53:09 AM AEST
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this was very good and very deep although it seemed draped with a coat of happiness which I thought was odd. Could have done with out all the random exclamation points that was not needed. Altogether aa good poem.
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Re: Suicide of a school girl!
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 15th February 2004 @ 05:37:28 PM AEST
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| your poem nearly made me cry |
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Re: Suicide of a school girl!
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by Arius-Inues on
Thursday, 19th February 2004 @ 10:18:42 PM AEST
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| Half in tears after reading, way to go in portraying that emotiom! keep it up! |
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Re: Suicide of a school girl!
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 3rd March 2004 @ 03:39:21 PM AEST
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that poem describes me exactly!!!!!!!! scary
but thank you it made me feel special |
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