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Silver Falcon
Contributed by
ShadowDaughter
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Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 10:13:39 PM in AEST
Topic:
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sterling silver, falcon mine
rub away your rust and dust
see the silver truly shine
layered beauty, deep-set trust
stretch and polish silver wings
shake off drops of dew and tears
silver thoughts: the laughter clings;
newly burnished-- gone the fears
I yearn to see your silver eyes
clouded not with tears of old
swiftly flying; gracious skies
guide to wonders yet untold
argent falcon, lick your scars,
rise anew in noble flight
too long been spent in glow of stars,
your time has come to leave the night.
sunset frames your silhouette
silver 'gainst the amber air;
hopes and dreams so sweetly met
falcon leaves his silver lair.
Copyright ©
ShadowDaughter
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Re: Silver Falcon
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by Remy on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 10:22:36 PM AEST
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Love the poetic flowy imagery type words, umm, yea!!
~Remy~ |
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Re: Silver Falcon
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by Wesley_Dale_Willis on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 10:22:45 PM AEST
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| Very nice write. I hope to see more from you. check out my last one. Regards Wes... |
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Re: Silver Falcon
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 13th February 2004 @ 12:01:20 AM AEST
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I really like the way the words flow into each other and that certain beat you captured.
-Esther |
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Re: Silver Falcon
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Friday, 13th February 2004 @ 07:13:34 AM AEST
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Nora...this is far above my miniscule little compliments. This is so breathtaking, I think you have finally topped "The Cruelty of Dreams" as my favorite. Thus I stand, in silent awe, at your superior talent.
Let's see: the rhyme is perfect, your word choice is it's usual amazing quality, and the rhythm is --mellifluous--- (yes, I stole your word and used it on you! ). This is, in my eyes, a true masterpiece.
Truly, with the biggest CEGH in recorded history,
-Dan |
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Re: Silver Falcon
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Friday, 13th February 2004 @ 08:43:16 AM AEST
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Okay, I can't help it. Had to comment again. I love this poem to death!
Truly,
-Dan |
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Re: Silver Falcon
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by Necromant on
Friday, 13th February 2004 @ 08:20:42 PM AEST
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Wonderful poem! Full of rhyme and flow and vivid description wow loved it! Keep it up!
Anne :D |
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Re: Silver Falcon
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by Fionndruinne on
Friday, 20th February 2004 @ 12:40:17 AM AEST
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Great imagery! And the rhyme is really good too. So few people pay attention to rhyme or rhythm these days...
Keep it up! |
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Re: Silver Falcon
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by lil_angel on
Wednesday, 25th February 2004 @ 04:38:13 AM AEST
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| This is really great! Keep the great work coming! |
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Re: Silver Falcon
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by ladyfawn on
Saturday, 28th February 2004 @ 11:16:49 PM AEST
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| simply beautiful, written with style and class:) hugs n' love nessa |
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Re: Silver Falcon
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by afraid_of_fear on
Saturday, 27th March 2004 @ 04:14:09 PM AEST
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this is beautiful...
charlotte x_x_x |
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Re: Silver Falcon
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by Vitreous_Soul on
Tuesday, 24th August 2004 @ 05:45:23 PM AEST
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I'll bet you think i've forgotten how much I love this poem--it's the best on all of YPDC! I felt it was worth reading again, and I love it every bit as much as the first time.
With inside jokes and love (always Nora),
-Dan |
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Re: Silver Falcon
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 1st September 2004 @ 04:24:45 AM AEST
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Followed V.S.' comment trail to this one, which i'm glad I did.
The weight of the words you use is balanced with skill, over the third stanza, and tips gently towards the ending gracefully, as your silver falcon flies, to the last. I appreciate the rhythm, and believe that you carved, etched, sketched and chiselled the imagery in this beautifully.
I'd like to think that the person this was meant for appreciated the skill and endeavour required to create something like this.
Thanks for sharing. |
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Re: Silver Falcon
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by Cynthia on
Monday, 27th September 2004 @ 09:22:11 PM AEST
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| I did enjoy this Nora. A very well written piece of work. *S* Cynthia |
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