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Try to Cry
Contributed by
Vitreous_Soul
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Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 06:03:57 AM in AEST
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Please stare into the looking glass
Stare deep within your mind
Please tell me what lies in your heart
What sorrows do you find
Between your eyes and glass alike
Are remnants left behind
I've seen your sterling silver soul
And felt your heart of gold
I've seen the depths of your resolve
The compassion you hold
You owe this release to yourself
To melt away the cold
It will consume your existence
Like thirsting succubi
If not for me and not for you
You'll find a reason why
Looking high toward welkin sky
Again you try to cry
Orphaned child never smiled
Yet more tears compiled
A longing sigh for days gone by
Again you try to cry
Say a word for a fallen bird
Your heart, it will be heard
Final goodbye or wrongful lie
Again you try to cry
Fail to defend a cherished friend
Release your tears in the end
Please stare into the looking glass
It reflects all that you deny
Between heart and mirror alike
There exists the need
For a shoulder on which to cry
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Re: Try to Cry
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by EternitysLyre on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 06:13:05 AM AEST
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Truly moving. Your friends are extremely priveleged to have you by their side. It's good to see a withdrawal from the abundance ofadvanced diction--the best messages are oft best found in simple words. The poem is touching beyond touching... Whoever it's for will find that time, as will I.
Until then, we must search again. To find our inner peace.
""A world of dreams is shattered glass; Fragmented remains of nostalgic past."
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Re: Try to Cry
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by forever_lonely on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 06:13:06 AM AEST
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wow dan
alot of this hit home with me, something i can really relate and connect to
Another truely great masterpiece by you again
as if i would expect anything less..
Thanks for sharing this dan its more than amazing its.. i dont know im speechless lol
Great write dan
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Re: Try to Cry
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by slayer_015 on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 06:32:54 AM AEST
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Monumental write.I throughly enjoyed this one.
Brian |
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Re: Try to Cry
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by bhavnas on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 07:04:08 AM AEST
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| beautifully written wth lots of expression....very nice......bhavna |
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Re: Try to Cry
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by Avarice_Riot on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 09:04:54 AM AEST
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| Wow. So much depth in this one.Amazing write. |
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Re: Try to Cry
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by sweetangeluk on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 09:22:51 AM AEST
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Please stare into the looking glass
It reflects all that you deny
Between heart and mirror alike
There exists the need
For a shoulder on which to cry
Truly beautiful incredible words
I loved this one so very moving and heartfelt
Love sweet angel ukxxx |
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Re: Try to Cry
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by Kie on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 12:19:03 PM AEST
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| Once again you made me cry. You have such a big heart and it shows in this poem. A great friend you are to have wrote this, and I hope those who need to cry, can let it all go, and just cry. Beautiful in every way. Kie |
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Re: Try to Cry
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by Putteragain on
Thursday, 12th February 2004 @ 03:49:48 PM AEST
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Dearest Dan
I think you are one of the best poets here each one just blows me away bravo my friend will lok for your book someday
michelle |
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Re: Try to Cry
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by venkat on
Friday, 13th February 2004 @ 04:23:55 AM AEST
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A heart moving write..very beautifully written.
venkat |
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Re: Try to Cry
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by blueheart on
Saturday, 14th February 2004 @ 01:47:20 AM AEST
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| This evoked a lot of thoughts. Brilliant stuff. |
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Re: Try to Cry
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by gery_giggles on
Sunday, 7th March 2004 @ 03:51:28 PM AEST
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you hit a nerve....eep.but very food write...your talented and i like all ur wprk..best of luck
luv always |
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Re: Try to Cry
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by lovingcritters on
Sunday, 14th March 2004 @ 10:36:35 PM AEST
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Dear VS
I'm amazed and in awe.
Your whole outlook as changed to thaw!
How wonderful what love can do.
This is an amazing poem, filled with compassion, and you!
wonderfully said, and done.
love
consue
but then you know me.......I love the loving ones! *smiles* |
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Re: Try to Cry
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by STRaNGe_LiNDSeY on
Saturday, 27th March 2004 @ 02:57:16 PM AEST
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| "If I tell you I love you, can i keep you forever?" hehe When's it my turn???? |
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Re: Try to Cry
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by silent on
Monday, 5th April 2004 @ 06:15:13 AM AEST
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WOW, that poem hit me hard, what a write. You expressed in this so much and so well written, i can't really give a comment to sum it up. Awestruck.
Silent |
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Re: Try to Cry
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by Black13 on
Monday, 14th June 2004 @ 04:17:35 PM AEST
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Beautiful write Dan.
I enjoyed reading this one alot.
I love the flow. Very powerful as usual. Nicely done...
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Re: Try to Cry
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by Pyrofungus on
Sunday, 5th September 2004 @ 04:22:21 PM AEST
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Bro your so talented...I know the feeling of not being able to cry...it seems to consume my whole body untill I am able to release the feeling from within...
please comment on my work too
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